Ashamed

If the dead man could talk to us, what would he say?

Ashamed of my past faults, I remain
I avow my own iniquities
But in my vault, cut off, from confession
Leaden in my lurid and cold last home
This haunting hill is where I lay, endlessly
The worms shall eat on the tainted reeking meat
The fate of all is to suffer as I
To forever more remain in their grave
I avow my own iniquities
Ashamed of my past faults, I remain.

Author's Note

There is a good look to the poem when it is centered. I'm using my iPod to post this. What do you all think?

Reviews

[Alex Miller<3]

Truly amazing...

[TJ]

"The fate of all is to suffer as I" this is definitely my favorite line. great piece, love the metaphor in it and the self-evalutaion. very good imagery as well I can almost see literal worms eating a corpse

[serpent]

a confession anthem of sorts...realization of sins and a thorough self-realization well narrated...

[Alicia Schroeder]

I think it a great write

[Tate Morgan]

I think this a good thing to do self evaluation but dont beat yourself up

[Gracie-San]

This was well written and I like the symmetry in the poem. Also, your descriptions were very well and overall I enjoyed it.

[darkgurl]

Whoa! This is amazing, like the wording. I like your last two sentences.

[R.S. Wilder]

Nice.

[child-of-promise]

this was good, strong, hit the nail on the head... have I been in that state? why, yes, I'm sure everyone has... the point is to not remain in that state, but I'm going to get crazy/biblical/religious and no one wants that...

again, well written...

[Annie29]

Moving (: