Dreams to nightmares.

Something yet to come.

The time has come to say my goodbyes.

To leave this home i once knew alone.

To leave this place where i lay my head.

It must be some amazing dream.

 

Or just maybe,

Maybe i'm dead.

 

My money spent,

Everything packed.

Everything that i own,

Rests on my quivering back.

 

It's hard to sa these final words,

To say that I love you,

Searching endlessly into your frozen eyes.

 

You braught me into this world,

Unaware that you were my host.

A mistakes was made.

 

F**k.

 

Let's toast!

 

To the days we spent together,

To everything you've ever done for me,

To being my mother,

To calling me your son.

 

i can see the tears well up in your frozen eyes.

Screaming to get out.

So you can say your final goodbyes.

 

Then it comes to you.

The person i fear but long to be.

You accepting us for who we were.

I'm putting you to blame.

 

For the guilt i feel,

With this decision i've made.

 

I'm only leaving,

To give back this life i took from you.

I'm leaving you my old host,

As none other than your son.

 

With so little thanks,

For all th s**t you've done.

 

I'm clasping the handle,

Readying the door.

For the world that knows not of my existance.

For the man that gave you this bourden.

 

Your eyes melt.

Your tears flow through.

You scream the words i took for granted.

 

I.

Love.

You.

 

The man who sits in the corner,

Lyndon was his name.

i can't help but notice his disgust,

As she embraces my name.

 

All i remember is their frozen eyes.

My I Love you,

Falling to your muted ears.

 

I looked back,

Thinking it couldn't be done.

 

His tears begin to flow,

As he calls me his son.

 

I try to say I love you,

Just to be sure.

Guilt strangling these words words that are stuck in my throat.

 

I've closed the door behind,

Never to be seen again.

To the only 2 people that have ever loved me.

 

I'm better off dead.

 

A yawn breaks the silence in this lonely room.

My eyes still asleep.

To have to live this nightmare today.

 

I hope this isn't true.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

Ok I have one small suggestion. In the stanza:
"I.
Love.
You."
Maybe try taking out the full stops, 'cause the emjambment used emphasises everything enough and removing the stops to it would make it infinate which would then convay to the readers that your love for this person is unlimited and never ending.

[dunnia]

very nice...i love the emotions you mixed in here

[Ryan]

thanks for the tips :D

[Brasso]

I know the typos aren't intentional, but let's say they are. It could be representing the speakers worry and fear, because if this was written rather than typed it would look very jumpy and ragged. Again, I like it, delivery of emotion is amazing. I can hear the speaker's voice so clearly when I read this.
Overall, amazing
Brasso