Just another day.

It's just another day in a 3/4 relationship.

It's a day like any other.

My hands crave for your flesh with the thought of fingers running down your spine.

I know this feeling with no other.

Than my Faith, so devine.

 

The nights creep closer with the knowledge of what i have learnt clutching my soul.

Only to find yours words are not only for me,

but another you've disguised.

With pixelated hearts and i love you's falling to that of blind eyes.

 

Here comes the judgement day.

When all can be lost.

I ask for a decision.

Your reply breaks my heart.

 

I love you with 3/4 of my heart were your words.

The other piece i'm not sure.

The final piece lays in his palms.

 

You ask if i still love you.

 

How can i love someone when my heart exists no more.

 

 

 

Author's Note

haven't written in a while :P and this is my first time submitting something online * nervous laughter *

Reviews

[M O R P H I N E]

This is just so beautiful. It's really different from most of the poetry that I read. In the sense of style and the message behind is very sad. I can actually feel a lot of emotion and that's something that a lot of poetry does not have...or lacks.
Anyway, you have written really wonderfully.
I really really love this.
So please, do keep writing and please share more :)

[Brasso]

WOW. just wow. Emotional. The tone suited it perfectly. The sense of flow, or lack of more importantly, shows the uncertainty in the other characters feeling, which is then projected onto the first character, and subsequently the reader. Great Rhythm and nice use of imagery. Not sure if it was intentional, but the way the last few stanzas break from the constant 4 line stanza perfectly shows the 3/4 heart you talk about,, shown best by the 4th stanza having three lines. This isn't poetry .... It IS word art.
Form - Great
Language - Intense
Imagery - Amazing and perfectly planted in the readers mind
Rhyme/ Rhythm - Blank verse to show uncertainty, not uncommon in poetry, but delivered very well
Structure - an almost perfect cross between enjambment (flow between lines) and lack of to show the inner turmoil of the speaker.
Hope you found this helpful,
Cheers for the work,
Brasso

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

I really like this one, love the last line most of all =)

[Molly]

The line on pixelated hearts was good. ^^
It's got some good emotion in here, well done.

[Ryan]

Damn made a couple of mistakes hahaha