The Demise

A haiku i wrote.

Lights of Glory Shine

Descent to Infernal Pits

Great Demise Begins

Author's Note

I was in a funny mood this morning...

Reviews

[Hannah]

short but i like it! you should post this kind of stuff more often

[Robert Robbie Lord Dudl..]

Reminds of dante's inferno
gets me a great picture of release

[Brianna Brie]

This offers a visually strong contrast between light and darkness, good and evil, etc. Perfect writing, but may I suggest a stronger, bolder font that drives home the words. The font feels weak next to these words.

[RyanXIII]

Thank you very much for your comments

[sasha]

A short poem with such strong words

Lights Glory Shine Descent Internal Great Demise Begins - and among them some are beautiful sound ones - descend, great, demise, glory

A good mood and a good poem.

[RyanXIII]

thank you for your comments im glad it struck a chord

[chaotic katie]

I like this piece. Very hard to write haikus (for me at least) but you wrote an exellent one. Nice job, i enjoyed reading

[RyanXIII]

thank you very much i hope you enjoyed my contest entry also

[thepurpleirises]

Personally, I've never attempted Haiku but I do like this.

It's deep and makes the reader think. That's important, I think.

Altogether, keep it up. :)

[Cassie]

Nice

[Temerity]

Hey! So I admire your stab at a haiku poem, because it's (obviously) hard to pack much into such a short statement. This was pretty good, as it is, and better than most haikus I've seen.

Anyway, keep writing, and best wishes.

[Dark Rider]

Nice job. Even though I'm not the best person to review poetry, I really like this. :)

[Jack...]

Pretty good really, maybe don't use so many caps. Haiku is an informal form of poetry. But still a good job.