Silent Please...

A child who longs for her mother's presence.

Every time I cry you are nowhere to be found

Lying on my bed without making any sound

Never sure if you could hear me weep

Hoping that I could feel comfort in my sleep. 

Reviews

[Ayushi Beura]

Ohhh so amazing and heart touching too...the situation you tried to describe, perfectly reach the readers... beautiful yaar amazing

[PenguinEmpiress]

Wow, this is so beautiful!! It's so relate-able too! But dark, it's dark but beautiful - i really love this poem!

[Rvie]

I'm really happy that you like it. Thank You so much. ^_^

[TheAimlessWanderer]

you have great potential as a writer Just KEEP WRITING !!

i loved the way you brought such a great flow to the imagery you were trying portray
AND in so few words moved someone to the point where they want to help you
thank you for sharing something so filled with raw emotion it was a pleasure to read.

i am going to subscribe to you because i can see you have something you need to say and i really want to see it all unfold.

Great job

Chris

[Rvie]

Thank You so much! I'm really happy upon reading your reviews it deeply moves me. It seems like you can see behind my walls. I never though that someone would like my work.

[TheAimlessWanderer]

you are most welcome keep writing !! i can't wait to see what you can accomplish !! (:

[Nwang]

Few words but a volley of emotions. Its not the length of the poem but its depth that matters and you have certainly shown yours. Great presentation.

[Rvie]

Thank You for your review. I deeply appreciated it.

[Larry John]

wow...this is very beautiful! I really feel the emotions you're trying to convey in this piece, you've written it very well. I think this has become one of my favourites! As someone who can relate to this feeling, I really appreciate you putting it into words. Thank you for sharing, I loved this poem a lot!

[Rvie]

Thank You so much! I can't take my smile off upon reading your reviews. I'm really having a doubt posting it. Really having doubts with myself. ^_^ I really appreciated your reviews.

[Indra Dharma]

Love the selection of words and how it rhymes.
It made me feel like a small boy reading it; knowing that feel of discomfort and nervousness whenever my mom wasn't around.

Anyway, I wish your poems were a bit longer though. I'd definitely love to read more of it :)

[Rvie]

Thank You so much. I truly appreciate your reviews. It motivates me to write more.

Yes, I also wish to make it longer but I'm really having a hard time writing long poems at the moment. I just don't know why.

[Indra Dharma]

You're welcome :)

It's okay. Ideas don't come over night, but when you do get the chance to write one, I'd love to read it!

[Rvie]

Sure, I actually have some written poems, but I'm having a doubt posting it.