Glenda V

mystery on a snowy mountain, enter mothman

the falling snow
lightly settled, 
slowly layered upon her frozen corpse
the needled rows of twigs 
fir trees' branches 
would not tell 
the times of her demise
what against her, commited crime

something happened in the night
in wee hours of the frozen morn'
between the minutes' dusk,
night's friend
concealed some fiend

to pitch of black, 'til rise of moon
those tracks 
that led to the cave
beneath the basaltic cliff
in whose shadow evil played 'n plotted mischief
murder hid therein; 
it would not emerge 'cept to pervert an' harm
the innocence of man, 
adulterate his works

until the holy messenger 
of God's own throne 
sent to recompense 
at the appointed time
coerced its emergence 
with words high and mighty
tormented demons' ear to piercing screams
was then cast into the bottomless pit
chained 'til time of recompense,
the appointed time for hell's lake
banished 'til then it went

the moth man lurked in the shadows grinning
he sneered silently, 
his view of the fiery sword of justice meted on his kind
deterred him nought
his murderous intent formulated 
lust and vengeance meditated 
on sweet Glenda's innocence

Reviews

[Bacchus]

Oh- the moth man... have you seen that movie- super creepy.

This is a horror filled tale-
not deterred... which makes it even more scary.

The length was just right to strike fear without wanting to stop reading-
because it was pretty intense.

you have some phrases like pitch black that are generic-
but the whole piece is very originally woven that it still works well.
I think you've accomplished your goal.

[RuseInex]

yes, Bacchus i agree about generic, and i'm impressed by your comment, sure appreciate your input, haven't seen the movie though, i don't think i could watch it without nightmares, being out in the mountainous wilderness at night is pretty super creepy too, CHECK OUT THE DYATLOV INCIDENT on YouTube!