Dead World

The first line says it all...

There's beauty in the eye of dissolution
Grey clouds hang like nooses
Lynching those who wish to dream

Brittle trees blow in the blue wind
The branches rain down onto the dead world
Giving new life to figures in black

Fragments of roses were scattered across the land
Angelic tears washing a homely ground
But the wind has dried that all away

Time is burning like a cigarette
Its smoke crawls towards the sky
And fades away into nihility

A lone man rests on a mountaintop
Watching life die like a wounded horse
Waiting for the night to kill the day

Reviews

[D S Rollins]

'Time is burning like a cigarette' What a POWERFUL image. You are talented, sir.

[KAREN BROWN]

there's a lot of beauty in our eyes if we allow it to be and see.you wrote wonderfully thank you for sharing this with me.

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

This was indeed very beautiful.

"There's beauty in the eye of dissolution
Grey clouds hang like nooses
Lynching those who wish to dream"

It was easy to read, but yet it kept its deep intent and beauty of things living and dead. I really enjoyed the way that you set up the poem with the three lines and such. It worked amazingly well for this.

Thank you for sharing.

[The Spaniard]

morbidly beautiful. This fit my mood perfectly tonight. Thank you.

[ANNA]

Dream like...I wish I could write the style you write! Your awesome !!!! Your talent is one that many see! Wonderful piece my freind...please keep them coming my way! Love reading your work...

Much love n respect,
Anna

[Lalli]

"there's beauty in the eye of dissolution
Gray clouds hang like nooses
Lynching those who wish to dream" -BRILLIANT!!

the depth within each sentence completes a perfect metaphor.

Imagery, is definitely a talent you have my friend. I enjoy your poems... although i would love to read one of a more lighter tone, and not so heavy on the death. (Only in curiousity to see how masterfully you would describe it)

robert i'm sorry it took so long to review this... i've been dealing with some major legality issues. I did not forget.

keep writing and send me more if you'd like me to read them.

much love n respect

-Lalli

[Legion]

Damn dude. The imagery in this is superb. I loved the nuance of each and every line. Well crafted. Going in favorites.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Very pensive and heartfelt poem although melancholic an enjoyable read. Great imagery. Nicely penned.
Light,
Siddartha

[Valentine]

Sad and lonely piece, leaving the reader to think of blue things instead of happy ones..written very well..God bless..Valentine

[Mistral Bilgera]

the first line says it all... and more beaty follows in such magically lonesome metaphors. It sends death to one's senses. perfect. :)