The Great Grey Nothing

A short, poetic social critique

Grey patches of nihilism are sprouting in the garden of life
Endless children born into a troposphere of torture
Religion carved into their flesh at the dawn of infancy
Adolescence molded into obedient rebellion
Willing to change with the vanity of bribery
Officious consciousness cracks the earth like the fist of an angry god
The human race is almost over and we're dead last

Reviews

[Pj]

That was so intense! It was brilliant and you conveyed so much in such a short space.
Nice work

[ANNA]

Great read! dark and brillant....thank for sharing

Anna

[Natasha Ashway]

'Religion carved into their flesh at the dawn of infancy...'

'Officious consciousness cracks the earth like the fist of an angry god...'

It's almost a shame the poem is not too long and yet so much has been said in the summation of those seven lines about the world there's enough to sit down for a while and think about.

I like those two lines; the picture frames you hung up those concepts in, flawless.

Thanks for sharing this with me. Great, great, food for thought, work.

[The Spaniard]

I love your short and pounding works. The impact of the words so loud they are deafening. I still haven't read anything from you i don't like

[Lalli]

captivating description my friend!

definintely dark, but it is truth as percieved.. and articulated carefully.

Well done *snap snap*
short to the point, and a great socially aware piece

much love n respect

-lalli

[Don Stabler]

Dark but not too dark. no room for hope though. who's going to change this scenario? time for someone to listen. I'm affected with a million places to begin. social comment well done. will the last be first?
or is it an earth with a few stragglers hangin out. anarchy, should homocide be legalized? I hear Doom Metal
from a grundgy bar. thanks Robert

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Interesting take on the world situation and some of its challenges. But I think the human race is a determined and resourceful survivor...time will tell.

[Mistral Bilgera]

interesting and powerful! a great piece that is short but speaks volumes about society!!!

[Seriana]

Ahhh, this is quite powerful! And so very true. I loved the colorful words you used, and the brevity of this poem is right on. Nice job Robert!

[Brandon Taylor-Black]

Interesting and well written piece. Strong images accompany this piece, in the minds eye.
I love this write and the whole 'theology' behind it.

Bravo

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