Love Poem: 2012

I think the title speaks for this one...

The blonde haired boy
With one eye and a twisted leg
Grasped his golden locket
And stared at the beautiful girl
Pictured inside
Her eyes were the color
Of a 20th century ocean
And her black hair caressed her shoulders
Like a lover
As her smile echoed beauty

The boy opened the door
And it fell of the hinges
As the roof of his house
Fell on the charred corpses
Of his family

He staggered on the sidewalk
Newly paved with the bones
Of a thousand dead children
Stumbling over disfigured people
Wandering aimlessly in search of shelter
Or any form of hope

She was in the corner of her room
Barely standing after the bomb
Her eyes were now the color
Of a junkie's piss
Her hair was charred off
Leaving dead skin to coat her sorrow
And her right arm was now just a shoulder
With nothing to caress it

He held her
While he kissed her bloody cheek
And they cherished everything they had
As they sat under the gray sky

Reviews

[KayOss]

Only you would think to compare the color of someone's eyes to a junkie's piss. It's just this side of "...eww." I don't know how you come up with it, but I'm so glad that you do. It's quite refreshing and something new for my eyes to play with. I like this poem. I really do. It was something entirely different. Even when I was reading it, it didn't turn out the way I expected it. I enjoyed the twists. I loved that despite everything, they had each other. Rather than focusing on their loss, they focused on and cherished what they had. Wonderfully done. Now excuse me while I go take care of this... Is someone chopping an onion? Yeah, that must be it.

[D S Rollins]

In.Tense!

[The Spaniard]

wow brotha, that was intense! Eluding to the end of the world as it is predicted to be 2012? either way it was incredibly vivid and I enjoyed it thoroughly.

[Brittney]

i really like all the details. i can picture it in my mind so clearly. great job.

[Pj]

Excuse me while I wipe my tears... It was so beautiful I loved the lines,
"And her black hair caressed her shoulders
Like a lover
As her smile echoed beauty"

How did you come up with that? Pure greatness!

[Adela Muresan]

It's wonderful how you illustrated, the fact that love is something unconditioned by the physical world.

Cheers x 100

A.M.

[Alex McFadyen]

I don't like this one as much because I don't understand the metaphors.

Is it just a story?

[Don Stabler]

the barren painful landscape turning into a touch of tenderness. agony extreme into a little peace.thanks for the poetry.

[Valentine]

The way the world is heading today this could happen at any time any place in the world..If people do not wake up to the fact that they have destroyed what God made beautiful..Nothing or noone will be left..Nice write..God bless..Valentine

[Bellarina]

This is beautiful. It really is. I love how it starts out with the romance, then describes the surroundings. That is amazing. Then it proves that in the end, no matter what, love will always conquer anything.