Field of Marble

In death - no! even in the grave all is not lost. Edgar Allan Poe

Heavy and grey the air is silently gliding,

along the truncated willow trees,

a creepy song and a muffled sighing,

as the spooky wind blows between

 

the weathered stone heads of marble.

 

Shadow leads macabre out of cadence

the light that dizzy and so faint

scatters his last remains in a dance

of an eternal remorse and sorrow on

 

the weathered stone heads of marble.

 

Freakish warped spine-chilling statures

draw the ground with black granite stones

with a cross to picture the final ending

to show us the way, departed under

 

the weathered stone heads of marble.

 

© Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

19/10/2014

Author's Note

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Tis said that cemeteries are other worlds - the visual limbos fin which Man can praise, honour and weep or smile for the dead. For me, you've created something grey yet luminous. i don't find your very fine words creepy - more accurate, more wrapped by history. Have to admit to walking around cemeteries reading the tombstones, noting relationships, where and when. But there is something about marble.. its its coldness.. appears sentry like as if on guard.

This is a somehow beautiful poem.. in spite of its grey veil.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

What a beautiful comment, Emma, I'm glad you liked it. Have a fine weekend. :) Rudi

[emmajoy]

Was my pleasure to read itit; although sombre, it beckons.

(Just correct4ed my typos, so sorry)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

No problem, I do it all the time, too fast too furious :)

[mattavelli]

Hi, Rudi. I really liked listening to this one, but there was a bit too much echo at times, so I had to read along. Ya, your recordings are fun! Keep them coming.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Matt. There is a lot of echo, but if you read the words while listening it's possible to follow, I used the echo to make an eerie atmosphere. :) Rudi

[mattavelli]

Yes, that's wat I did. It was good!

[Jamestown]

Well penned!
The eerie feeling of a cemetery and unavoidable truth
of our days end, great piece of work and cool picture:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, James, for your favorable comment. :) Rudi

[Confuser]

Rudi, the creepy ominous descriptions are haunting but beautiful...loved the visual you have created, wonderful details, heavy air, and the repeating phases work well; weathered stone heads of marble; emphasizing the age, not only of the cemetary, but of the person...Field of Marble, now I love that title. That's what I kept seeing in between everything, everyline, that marble. thanks, Dale

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Dale, for reading and your kind remarks. Have you listened to the poem on soundcloud, if you click on the big window below the poem you can listen to me reading the poem with some creepy effects. :

[Confuser]

Rudi, will try again, had some problems....Dale

[Confuser]

Will not work? Must be on my side: so sorry Rudi. Nope, not working.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Maybe you can hear it if you go directly to soundcloud. Here's the link:

https://soundcloud.com/rudi-lejaeghere/morning-sound-by-rudi-jp-lejaeghere-song-out-of-the-musical-oklahoma-by-rodgers-hammerstein

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Here above is the link to 'morning sound' and the link to 'Field op marble' is:

https://soundcloud.com/rudi-lejaeghere/field-of-marble

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, Dale, I almost forget to thank you with all this music stuff. :) Rudi

[s]

Perfectly describes the Graveyard nearest to me... I can appreciate the use of line displacement "the weathered stone heads of marble.", personally I think that the repetition of phrases can create a familiar sense of rhythm which is always enjoyable to the reader. An eerie and emotive work, nonetheless.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Angel, glad you liked it. Have you listened to the spoken version too? :) Rudi

[s]

Yes...I found it thoroughly enjoyable. Thank you for sharing. X

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

My pleasure, Angel, glad you liked it. :) Rudi

[ANTO]

Too much echo in the soundcloud file Rudi. The reflections overtook it in places, I felt
Having said that, this poem is everything a spooky graveyard write should be, sinister and dripping with Gothic-ness. This kind of poem and movies like the Old Hammer House of Horror is what keeps me well away from graveyards unless the sun is in the sky.
Very well done my friend.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, ANTO, these are my first tries with spoken words and music, giving it some effects. I tried to make it sinister like a graveyard. Thanks for reading and reviewing. :) Rudi

[ANTO]

It definitely is sounding grand though - keep at it my friend.

[B]

Rudi you are very creative
You know how to magical transform your words from light to dark and vice versa

I felt like i was in a graveyard
I could feel the spirits of the dead all around
I could see the greys

You are a magician lol

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Nisreen, I'm so happy you like it, I thought my voice wouldn't catch the feeling of the words, buy now after 3 poems I think I've found a new way to bring my poetry. :) Rudi

[B]

You are a shinning star :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Don't make me blush. Thank you again. :)

[B]

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[....................]

a haunting depiction of the cemetery but a beautiful one... the repetition is brilliant, constantly reminding us that our time is coming... and, you have developed a heavy and gloomy atmosphere in your opening stanza, carrying it throughout... great work, Rudi

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, FT, I'm glad reading your words, it's a new way of bringing my poetry. I have still a lot to discover and to try, but I love experimenting with words and sounds. :) Rudi

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Here above a field of marble in words and sound by your truly... Enjoy and let me know if it's good or bad or both. :) Rudi