The Swan Song

Being born in a duck yard does not matter, if only you are hatched from a swan's egg. Hans Christian Andersen

Bad news it was when the world broke
out in rain, out of my eyes a piece
of sorrow flowed, a sudden decease
came effortless and pitiless it stroke

into a last and sober writing, closed
and intertwined with a cross on wood,
returning to the earth, cold and for good
with your hands entangled like you dozed

off and never will sing your song again,
in verses you disappear, the Swan on the lake
so silently swimming away and trying in vain

to hold you in my eyes, in my mind, to take
your words of a Swan Song, my heart’s full of pain
forever and ever, your rhymes will now come awake.

© Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere
29/04/2015

dedicated to Iris Van de Casteele (23/11/31-13/02/2015)

Reviews

[Confuser]

Rudi: Another amazing write. There are layers within this; I know people write that, but I can see so many images in this poem; that photo is gorgeous, with many thoughts about them. The thought, the visual of a swan alone, is sad, knowing they mate for life, and the line about the cross, I see a wooden cross beside me Hane made in bible school, the coldness to be left alone, the deep meloncholy feeling of knowing always to be alone, without your love one, the way you describe is superb. I will remember this for awhile. Well done Rudi...very well done indeed. A flood came, in drops of pain. Dale

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you so much, Dale. My mentor, Iris van de Casteele, the one who had stimulated me and had helped me to publish my first work (a collection of poems) has died in February. I've dedicated this poem to her. She was in fact, a bit a lonely swan, never understood by the 'Poet Society' in Belgium and the Netherlands. She has even emigrated to Paraguay with her soulmate, an Uruguayan musician Cacho Aguire. They have returned a few times to visit some friends here in Belgium and at that occasion have been a guest in my house. She has also given a party when she became 80 here in Belgium, it was the last time we have seen her. She has written beautiful poems and she wrote also in French, Spanish and English. I'll never forget her. :) Rudi

ps: here's the link to her website with all her poems
http://www.coquelicot.com.py/coquelicot/

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

I see you have a new avatar, Dale. :) Rudi

[Confuser]

That's Catherine, my daughter, but her chins cut off....:]Dale

[Confuser]

Rudi: I am so sorry for your friend. She sounds very interesting. I have saved the poem, so I can visit the website; I'm certain she would love the poem, it's a lovely tribute, now I understand more. I will also save the other poems with website, wind, etc. so I can listen...Thanks Rudi.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, so much, Dale, means a great deal to me. Have good day with your family. :) Rudi

[Confuser]

You too Rudi...& You're welcome as always.....

[Geo Lawrence]

A masterpiece from you. I got attracted to your poem through it's name. I must say you have inspired me and therefore this poem has earned my vote at...

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you so much, Udeokechukwu Chidiebere, really appreciated. :) Rudi

[anne]

beautiful as always...I want to learn this writing style, love for elements of nature...you will help me?

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

It's the Italian sonnet form, 4 stanzas 4-4-3-3 sentences, you also have a Shakespeare sonnet, that's 4-4-4-2 . The rhyme is mostly abba for the stanzas with 4 sentences. You can find much more details about the sonnet by clicking on the following link:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sonnet
If you want I always can edit a sonnet you've written, that's no problem at all. Give me a message with the text and I'll look at it, Anne. So, I should say: start writing... :) Rudi

[anne]

thank you for the information Sir, I will try next time..:))

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Don't Sir me, Anne, please, it's just Rudi :)

[RiverRei]

I love this...so majestic and wonderful as I like to picture the swan to be. I also think this is a little too mature and elegant for me. I had a hard time understanding some of your wording and what you wanted me to imagine and gleam from the lines. Overall I do love the piece though. Thank you for sharing it with me :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, RiverRei, for reading and reviewing. Have good day. :) Rudi

[R Smith]

Beautiful work Rudi, love swans so graceful and worthy of such writing :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Richard, they indeed are. :) Rudi

[sereenaoutloud]

Wow so beautiful and graceful! Love this Rudi!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Sereena, glad you liked my poem. :) Rudi

[Ana B.]

A masterpiece, astounding in it's grace, one of your finest dear author :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you so much for you nice comment. Always glad to read your review. :) Rudi

[Ana B.]

Anytime my friend :)

[B]

I cried reading this

A beautiful way to say goodbye
Elegant, kind and sweet

Your soul is all over this piece
And it is a beautiful one

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Wow, Nisreena, that's a very nice compliment you gave. thank you so much. Glad you loved this one too. :) Rudi

[Jamestown]

Well penned!
This piece holds sadness but elegance in the write,
great picture to as well, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, James, for your kind remarks. :) Rudi

[....................]

A beautifully sad write, Rudi, but so full of love and admiration. No sweeter gesture than to offer your own 'Swan Song' in honour of her life and passing. Well-done!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you very much, FT. I'm glad you liked it too. Have much to be grateful to her, so that's the least I can do. :) Rudi