Drowning

The present was an egg laid by the past that had the future inside its shell. Zora Neale Hurston

How I set my sails

tight with feelings

in the storm being

the foam on the waves

and irrevocable

 

drowning

 

in the whirlpool

to be dragged further

and torn apart

I feel myself fled

spread in droplets

 

drowning

 

in a sea of thoughts

I’m gripping

my parts together

to blow a whole new me

on the beach

 

someone is picking me up

as a shell

I listen to the morning.

 

© Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

16/10/2014

Reviews

[Vishuddha]

I wondered who it was I heard in those shells. I was told it was the ocean but I knew that was something grown-ups told to children and then winked at one another as though we would not notice. Now it becomes apparent it was the soul of someone lost at sea.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

That's a very good explanation, Lily, I hadn't heard it before. Thanks for reading and commenting. :) Rudi

[maricoona91]

Last line is so great.. oops I need more characters! Have a great day =)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you so much, Maricoona91, I'm glad you liked it. :) Rudi

[sereenaoutloud]

This i a great piece. Being so overwhelmed with it all, you feel like you are drowning and sometimes you need to hit rock bottom before you can start getting back up! love this and the photo is beautiful too!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Serena, glad you liked it. Have a fine day. :) Rudi

[Confuser]

Rudi: Phenomenal...it is so very relateable to me and without some chaos, something happening so horrible that shocks our senses, and our course that is different for everyone, there would be no humanity at all. As we age, I suppose, experiences pile up and those feelings/thoughts of being pulled this way and that change...I love your poems. You are so talented. Thank you...Dale
in the whirlpool
to be dragged further
and torn apart
I feel myself fled
spread in droplets
(wonderful...but so is every syllable!)

drowning

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Dale, you're always very kind to me, your words are very appreciated :) Rudi

[Confuser]

It's all true; just posted a poem; hope you tell me what you think: Salty Perserverance. Anyway...Thank you so much too, love your poems

[Jamestown]

Really nice piece of work, is you know just spent some time at the beach
and I too used the shell as shown in picture:) Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thanks, James, for visiting and commenting. Have a fine day. :) Rudi

[anne]

in a sea of thoughts
I’m gripping
my parts together
to blow a whole new me
on the beach

someone is picking me up
as a shell
I listen to the morning.........
i have fallen in love with your poetry...I love the nature elements playing in your work...:))

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Ann, means a great deal to me, really appreciated. Have a good day. :) Rudi

[....................]

Another beautifully written piece about ridding oneself of old feelings, old memories and old ways - in this case drowning. I get a sense that one has to suffer that 'near death' experience before being able to star anew. I enjoyed this.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, FT, for visiting and reading my poem. Always glad to read your comments. :) Rudi

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is so hauntingly beautiful...especially the last stanza...reminds me a bit of "message in a bottle"---and the feelings evoked from that story.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Jacob, a great compliment you're giving. Much obliged, have a good day. :) Rudi