A flight full of words

The right word may be effective, but no word was ever as effective as a rightly timed pause. Mark Twain

They fly away as birds

out of my right hand

a flight full of words

sentences taken

from my lips by the wind

swirling through each other

strung together in a meaning

as a letter chain of pearls

which will fit you perfectly

 

leaving me orphaned, speechless

my mouth still in the mould

my spirit still in this mood

of creation

 

I know the hunger and the abundance

when the corn has been mown

the bread tastes as never before.

 

© Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

01/01/2015  

Reviews

[Frank]

which 'will fit' you perfect [perfectly: adverb] note. adverbs must accompany the verb ie. fit - to fit

if you said which will look perfect on you, that would be correct

I think corn is cut, I maybe right, but for usage most would say cut.

This is a marvellous description of the use of the spoken word, comparing it to the flight of birds, a transient yet enduring communication. You have also encompassed the thoughts process and the emotions that go with words that are spoken. You finish with another analogy, the benefit after the cutting, so is the sowing of words in the right ear, like in a ear of corn.

Very well done.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

thank you, Frank, for reading and reviewing. :) Rudi

[J.C. Rabanes]

yes, words are effective it expresses a strong emotions and good meaning through it.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you John for passing by. :) Rudi

[The Twin Arenas]

there is a "wealth" in your work that I really like, if that makes sense.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you very much for saying that. Glad you like my work. :) Rudi

[AprilRN1210]

nothing tastes as good as when starving.. love the quote that you started the piece with.. this is such a powerful piece.. watching those words take flight is quite a feeling that little compares.. lovely writing.. one that many of us can relate to... I thoroughly enjoyed..

on a side note, and just my opinion, but would probably replace "stringed" with "strung"..

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you April for your kind remarks. Indeed, strung is the right word. Have corrected it, thanks for the suggestion. :) Rudi

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome, glad I could help

[Laura Lynn]

' when the corn has been mown...the bread tastes as never before.' are my favorite lines

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you again, Laura, for taking time to read my writing. :) Rudi

[MsJewel]

As writers, sometimes we need to let the words fly and it can be a delight to see where they land....
Love the creativity of this one Rudi. Amazing writing my friend

:) Julie

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you so much, for your favourable comments, Julie. :) Rudi

[A Ghost of Myself]

I've always laughed when people say word's hold no meaning, from my perspective they're stronger than any blunt object or projectile armory, (the pen is mightier than the sword) but perhaps I'm wrong, because the silence, the pauses, the utter stillness, is overwhelming; they grant true reflection. I'm off to ponder, thank you.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you for your words, Jack. I think it's always good if words sets someone off to ponder. Glad I succeeded in that. :) Rudi

[Matching Socks]

The right words can be so sweet but ill chosen or timed can be bittersweet.
You're poem are lovely and always a treat.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you so much Ana Sophia, for your kind remarks. :) Rudi

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the mark twain quote...how those pauses really make the difference...reminds me of a part in Eddie and the Cruisers...where Wordman shows how the pauses work for effect in a song...same in a poem...
i like the stanza with "leaving me orphaned, speechless..."

the words often fly away, maybe before they are ready to fly...and they might not make the sense intended from the poet.

nice piece, Rudi.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you Jacob, for taking time to read and for your wise words. :) Rudi

[Rene Salinas]

I did a piece once on John Cage. In fact it is astounding that they day he decided to "play " 4:33 to the masses there was euphoria even amongst the erudites. The contentious point, the importance of Silence. In his case greatly studied and well documented in musical terms and also in terms of quiettude, inner stillness so on so forth. So reading this it is just a reminder that words may not necessarily imply meaning. Mainly becuaser they can be intelectualized, or simply felt with vacuity of feeling or out of time. So they can't quite represent what they're trying to reach.

But what still remains unsolved is what is the right combination then? So that words do actually represent with honesty the correct meaning and hence drive the right action.

Thoughtful writing here Rudi.

Thank You.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Yes, Rene, as a writer that's always the question, what is the right combination, sometimes words can't catch a feeling, it's more a description of the feeling. But indeed, there's also silence and the impact at a certain moment is sometimes bigger than a whole poem of beautiful words. Thank for your always appreciated review. :) Rudi

[A Ghost of Myself]

I accidentally posted my review on Rene's, because while reading it, it reminded me about a piece he wrote about a pianist who walked out on stage and didn't play a single note . . . my mistake, mistake rectified.