2. The Shadows

2. The Shadows

A Chapter by Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere
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“I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.” ― Edgar Allan Poe

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There’s that little dark feeling

Lurking in the corner of my mind,

My thoughts tiptoe around it

Afraid to wake it, to stir it,

To call upon the shadows,

Being around it makes me shiver,

A fever creeping through my veins.

 

Sometimes it’s red and pulsing,

Full of hate and anger,

Ready to explode,

A dormant volcano inside my head,

And underneath the heat

Of lava, that flows in flames

Searching for a way out, to burst,

 

It flies and cries like the raven,

Crawls and gnaws like rodents on my soul,

I put my hands deep into my pockets,

Fists denying what the sounds

Coming from the shadows of that corner

Are demanding of my body,

A fight that one day I will lose for sure,

 

How can I escape these noises

That drive me mad

But to let it overwhelm my senses.

 

© Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

14/02/2016

 

music: www.bensound.com

 



© 2016 Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere


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Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

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Hmm, from what I've read I feel like your later pieces among this series are superior than those from the beginning. I don't know, like you seemed to get a sense of layering and veiling your metaphors a bit better. At times this struck far too direct, and repeated an idea too often especially in regards to the volcano ready to burst. Volcanic eruption also feels out of place with the title and the concept of a ticking, tapping shadow gnawing away at us like a rodent does to a rope. Get what I mean?

I liked this (and it reads great from the audio, may I borrow your voice for a month?). But, you've definitely gotten better after this one. There's work to be done editing here.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the review and the big compliment about my voice. :) Rudi
Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

8 Years Ago

Will keep the comments in my mind if I publish this on paper sometime. :)



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Hmm, from what I've read I feel like your later pieces among this series are superior than those from the beginning. I don't know, like you seemed to get a sense of layering and veiling your metaphors a bit better. At times this struck far too direct, and repeated an idea too often especially in regards to the volcano ready to burst. Volcanic eruption also feels out of place with the title and the concept of a ticking, tapping shadow gnawing away at us like a rodent does to a rope. Get what I mean?

I liked this (and it reads great from the audio, may I borrow your voice for a month?). But, you've definitely gotten better after this one. There's work to be done editing here.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the review and the big compliment about my voice. :) Rudi
Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

8 Years Ago

Will keep the comments in my mind if I publish this on paper sometime. :)
This is really really good Rudi. Sometimes thoughts tiptoe around my mind and find their way in my mind, bad thoughts and then I have to shoot them back so that they go back where they are from

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Cassie, for reading and commenting. Have a good weekend. :) Rudi
That's an interesting situation, to see madness in yourself, trying to contain it. Its probably best to avoid crowds. Haha

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

8 Years Ago

That's so true, Matt. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Glad to read your comment. :) Rudi
Very nice use of words and photo.
"How can I escape these noises
That drive me mad
But to let it overwhelm my senses."
I could feel the madness in the thoughts. Thank you Rudi for sharing the excellent words.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

8 Years Ago

Thank you, John, for your appreciating words. :) Rudi
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend.
Emotions are rising, dark thoughts and sights nudging at your mind.. Your poem's building steam, you're using quite fine meter too, takes some doing.. in fact there's a a touch of EA Poe..

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

8 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and the nice comment. Means a great deal to me. :) Rudi

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Wingene, West-Vlaanderen, Belgium



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I'm from Belgium. English is not my native language, but I like to read English poems and books. I have written a lot of Dutch poems during the last forty years. With some of them I've got prizes in B.. more..

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