I like how your showing a perspective of more than one creature in danger, and not leaving humans out of it. Cause humans go about there days thinking there not in danger, when any one of those seconds, you could be on the side, where you are getting eaten by one of those animals.
I like how your showing a perspective of more than one creature in danger, and not leaving humans out of it. Cause humans go about there days thinking there not in danger, when any one of those seconds, you could be on the side, where you are getting eaten by one of those animals.
wow!!!! I let out those words (wow) after reading this, this is such an encouraging poem. Deserves to be shelved and re-read often as a reminder. I love the nails of my coffin are not available yet. I love this Rudi!! great job.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you, Cassie, it's indeed a bit confronting, but it's the only right way to go...I think. :) R.. read moreThank you, Cassie, it's indeed a bit confronting, but it's the only right way to go...I think. :) Rudi
I enjoyed this poem, especially the use of water and the creatures which swim within. As all of life is based on and maintained by water I take your water world to be life itself, its nature being dog-eat-dog, red-in-tooth-and-claw and survival-of-only-the-fittest. Struggle, persist and always forward even until the inevitable end. Shivering dark and a wonderful write.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
You're so right, Lily, with your review. But now I'm going straight on, escaping that world. Glad yo.. read moreYou're so right, Lily, with your review. But now I'm going straight on, escaping that world. Glad you liked it. :) Rudi
Ok ok ok, I won't look back! Haha
This is a great kick to anyone who has fallen into regrets.
I will focus on my path and ignore naysayers and things that might keep me from my goals.
It's great, Rudi! Scare us in the right direction. :) Matt
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9 Years Ago
Thank you, Matt, for reading and reviewing. I don't know why, but lately I'm a bit into the scary po.. read moreThank you, Matt, for reading and reviewing. I don't know why, but lately I'm a bit into the scary poems. I think (hope) it's a phase. :) Rudi
You have shared some wise and inspiring words in this well written gem Rudi. I love the last few lines - they sum up the poem and your ideas perfectly. It's always a pleasure to read you my friend.
:) Julie
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9 Years Ago
Thank you, Julie, for passing by and reading my poem. Glad you liked it. :) Rudi
this has such a strong message and one i agree with totally... time looking back is wasted time that could be used to live in the here and now !!
Just a superb write and imagery Rudi!!
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you Sereena, glad you liked this one too. Have a good day, my friend. :) Rudi
love the coffin part works so well...not available yet...
and of course we must avoid that flyswatter...we have to keep our heads up in order to do that.
well expressed.
j.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you, Jacob, for reading and commenting. :) Rudi
I'm from Belgium. English is not my native language, but I like to read English poems and books. I have written a lot of Dutch poems during the last forty years. With some of them I've got prizes in B.. more..