Iain

Iain

A Poem by RubyOmma
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Oops, cared too much about a boy in the navy

"
Here you are
Strong arms
holding me
kissing me sweet
and there you go.

I don't know what to do now.
I can still feel you
Still smell you
You are on my pillows and sheets.
I love you, a little bit.

Smart boy. Handsome boy.
Teasing me with your words
and making me want more.

All while you're going away.
I hate this a little bit.
And I love you a little bit more.

Let's go back to the bedroom
it's our home
it's what you want
from me
Maybe it's the only thing you want
from me

Crying and asking you to stay
but you go
anyway.

Fine then.
I will be strong
I will be fine, in the end.
We do what we have to.
I will always remember.

© 2014 RubyOmma


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I really liked this. You know based on my attempt at poems the style I go for. Reading this though has me rethinking how I write them. I was moved by the visuals put in front of me and I was able to place myself in those shoes, and I enjoyed what I felt when I did that.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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We do what we have to.
I will always remember.

Heartbreaking poetry. Nicely done dear.............

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A sad poem of heartbreak but from this negative tale comes a positive poem, make use of life and you will always be a great writer RubyOmma seems your already there.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This piece is very emotionally vast. The mood is very clear and vivid. Your words flow perfectly. One thing i will say is the very last stanza about the dogs...seemed really random...did I miss something? lol

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Briana O'Connor

10 Years Ago

lol you don't have to change it on my account
RubyOmma

10 Years Ago

I love a good editing comment when it makes it better. I have a dog Ruby Sue (Thus Ruby Omma - I liv.. read more
Briana O'Connor

10 Years Ago

Glad my confusion could help lol
this is really emotional and I can read the flow easily very nicely done :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aw sadness. =( I liked the monologue throughout the poem. It is her thoughts throughout their relationship and though she knows it won't last she is still attached and can't help but love him. Very beautiful.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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KK
Not my typical structured poem but, I enjoyed it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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ke
I like your writing style, very thoughtful. The fact that it is not a typical poem that rhymes, shows that you have great vocabulary and you are very creative. Nice job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


maybe the inevitability of foreclosed gratification makes the desire of a connection irresistible. we give our bodies willingly to leave an indelible mark, but we lose a little part of ourselves. the loss is great enough to make that small span of time with them intense and memorable. your words flow flawlessly and speaks to those of us who have experienced the same thing. i like your passion and honesty. excellent job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really liked this. You know based on my attempt at poems the style I go for. Reading this though has me rethinking how I write them. I was moved by the visuals put in front of me and I was able to place myself in those shoes, and I enjoyed what I felt when I did that.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I am obessesd wid ur poems yar.... i jus love them extremely amazin lines especially the first stanza.....!!!!
thanks fr sharing


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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RubyOmma

Pohang/Deagu, Gyeongsandbuk do, South Korea



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