the POET

the POET

He sits upon the lap of nature

Drawing inspiration there to write,

A sower of seeds within his heart

He pens in silence of the night.

He's a tree watered by beauty

Bearing fruit the hungry heart yearns,

A link between this and the coming world

An inextinguishable lamp that burns.

He's a white cloud on the horizon

Growing to fill the face of the sky,

Falling on the flow in the field of life

A heart that will never die.

He's a spring where the thirsty may drink

A slave to our want and our need,

His pen is his might, his soul the ink,

His work is the fruit of his seed.

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Greetings, Roth 🍁

I extend a warm welcome to the Caƒé and a grateful thank you for the friendship request … and, I must say this is quite the excellent poem to begin reading your work.
Even though your lines are not all even in count, from the smoothness and natural meter of your syntactic diction and poetic voice, vivid imagery, creative metaphor, and spot-on rhyme, it is more than a little obvious this is not your first poetic rodeo … in fact, it's my discernment that this piece rivals some of the top onsite writers.
Along with your request to read "the POET" and explain what classical style means, I'll say that, although, the a-b-c-b, d-e-f-e, etc; rhyme-scheme is sufficient for one version of the classical Ballad format, due to the uneven line meter and syllable count, it falls short.
In saying this, it in no way detracts from this most brilliantly excellent work being a superbly rendered poem, that I have fully enjoyed in every way … title, artwork choice, neat layout, and it's amazingly beautiful when recited aloud. The originality and imagery alone in your poem are sigh-worthy, indeed!
Classical examples of poetry would be the Sestina, Ballad, Sonnet, Villanelle, Kyrielle, Pantoum, Villanelle, and Ottava Rima, to name a few … what some contemporary poets consider "structured poetic form", and a few even refer to classical poetry as "archaic" … each to their own view.
Roth, I hope this cleared it up for you.
Personally, I enjoy reading and composing in both classical and contemporary style or format.
Gosh, Roth, just look at the length of this! In my defense, I suppose there is no short way of explaining what classical poetry is.
Drop by my place for a read or two … you'll find all sorts of forms there. Your form here, by-the-way, would be "Unmetered Rhyming Quatrains".

In whatever form or name, this a gorgeous piece to be proud of … KUDOS! ⁓ Richard🖌

Wee critique: final line, give "work's" an apostrophe or make it, "work is". : )

[Roth Jordain]

Hi Richard,
I thank you sincerely for your welcome to the Cafe and for answering my question of what a classical poem is. The classical poem names you said seem fascinating -- do you know how I can learn about them? I have heard of a Sonnet before, poems by William Shakespeare and the Ballad name, but not the other kinds you mention.
You are correct, this is not my first time to write poems -- I have written for around 8 years so far. I like to try different rhyme plans, and once wrote a poem with no rhymes at all about my Israeli homeland that I might share here.
I thank you too for saying nice things about my poem and for telling me its kind of form.
I added 'is' to the last line and it sounds rhythmic now when spoken.
I will read your poems soon with thoughtful reviews -- yours is of perfect length.

With grateful bows of thanks Richard and 'a happy weekend',
Roth

[Richard🖌]

Roth,

Thank you for the happy weekend wishes, and the very same to you. : )
You are certainly welcome … the pleasure was mine, and I thank you, too, for your thoughtful friend request.
To learn the different classical forms, you would need to seek out a skilled, experienced, and willing teacher; or, a good place to begin would be to YouTube search each form … for example: go to YouTube and type "Ballad Lessons" in the search bar, or whatever form(s) you might be interested in learning.
Not that you asked, but with your obvious poetic potential, it would be a pleasure to take you on as a student. Alas, my enrollment is currently full, and I don't know of anyone else onsite who teaches, or gratis free on any site, for that matter. Still, you might ask around, or those who've reviewed you.
Or, on the page with most of my poems that are composed in the classical forms mentioned above, the instructions for writing each is included: to access my titles with the form name each is written-in included, go to my profile and click on "Writing" above my name and it will bring them up.

I hope this helps, Roth … anything else, please, don't hesitate to let me know! ⁓ Richard🖌️

[Roth Jordain]

Thank you Richard,
I will use your very helpful advice.
It would be and honor to learn from you Sir. Not to seem greedy, but is there a waiting list please?
Thank you too for the AdBlock, from all the ads I left, but I am glad I came back.

[Richard🖌]

Roth,
Please, message me at your convenience.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think sometimes we wish our heart would die. Might make the words we write less painful.
I really appreciate how this poem is built upon metaphor....and done so well.

that lamp must keep burning.
j.

[Roth Jordain]

Hi Jacob,
Yes it is true there are those times writing of sorrows and anger tug a poet's heart in ways we would rather not see or know about, yet it sings within and flows from out our souls with no choice.
I too appreciate metaphor -- I think it is one of a poet's influential tools to keep that lamp burning.

Thank you Jacob most deeply,
Roth

[John the Baptist]

An exalted picture of a poet here. When I get down on my efforts, I'll refer back to this one. I'm sure it will counterbalance writer's block.

[Roth Jordain]

Hi John,
I hope you never 'get down' with the writer's block but am glad you will use my poem to pull you out if you ever do.

Thank you for reading my poem and your nice compliment,
Roth

[Red Brick Keshner]

Reading this brings me back to the heart of poetry from a poets mindset and unique use of words. A total pleasure to read. Thanks for having shared with us. /Frederick.

[Roth Jordain]

Hi Frederick,
I is a delight to receive your generous and thoughtful comments and to have you read my poem.

You are sincerely welcome, I thank you too,
Roth

[Patricia]

First let me say, welcome to Writerscafe:) My name is Patricia and most just Type a “P” for me.

Second, well done poem, great content, writing through nature is always a hit with me. This has nice flow, rhythm and rhyme which is always a pleasure to read, I do love classical writings. Really nice descriptive lines in this as well :)
Third, forgive my mistakes if I made any, I do reviews on my phone, easier to see but harder to type.

[Roth Jordain]

Hi "P",
It is wonderful to meet you and I thank you for your friendly welcome.
How inspiring and gratifying your praise and expressions of pleasure are to my ear.
I see no mistakes -- only caring, generous and sincere words from a very attentive lady.

Thank you sincerely "P" for reading this poem and expressing your enjoyment,
Roth

[Patricia]

You're welcome and good luck here! P.

[Temperance]

Another wonderful read, Roth! I am so glad you are here in the Cafe! Your talent should be shared! Great inspiration and homage to poets. I believe most of us write from the heart….from what we see and feel. Thank you for sharing.

[Roth Jordain]

Hi again Temp,
I too am very glad to be at the Cafe, you make me feel welcome.
What a nice thing to say about my talent, no one has ever said that to me. Yes from the heart -- it's where we should write from.

You are very welcome Temp, I also thank you sincerely,
Roth

[Einstein Noodle]

Fantastic tribute to Poets .. well done says i! .. smooth flow powerful imagery and who will not relate and glow reading this ... right here at the Cafe' .. nice job!!
E.

[Roth Jordain]

Hi Einstein,
Thank you for your visit and all the inspiring compliments.
I am pleased you relate with this poem as it is about You too.

I sincerely enjoyed your review,
Roth

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ........................ I am humbled sir .. thank you!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This is stellar poetry! Excellent imagery accents the strong descriptive qualities and logical progression throughout. "a sower of seeds within his heart" YES! I wrote a metaphorical allegory entitled "poet farmer" once describing the same observation from a different perspective. Poets are magicians of sorts but far more than one trick ponies. They work in emotions and empathy. They reach out to touch our souls from shadow figures on a gilded page. Highest marks on this. I thoroughly enjoyed. F.

[Roth Jordain]

Hi, Fabian,
Thank you sincerely for your praise and for enthusiastically enjoying this poem to all poets.
I wholeheartedly agree with your keen assessment of poets. Your farmer poet piece sounds interesting too.
As a new member, what an inspiring treat it is to receive a knowledgeable, appreciative and insightful review for a first poem.

Thank you again Fabian, I wish for you a great day,
Roth

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

An inspirational piece of poetry that speaks to the writer's heart and their journey into creativity. Strong use of metaphors to illustrate the message. A good solid piece. Thank you for sharing your work with us.

[Roth Jordain]

Hi Carlos,
You are sincerely welcome.
How nice it is to receive this review from a poet who expresses such enjoyment and understanding of poetic devices.

I thank you too Carlos for choosing to read me -- a true honor,
Roth

[Cherrie Palmer]

Beautiful poem Roth. I hope many readers stumble across this poem and that you add many more here to your collection.
Poets and dreamers are the music of life. How drab life would be without them.
Welcome aboard 😊

[Roth Jordain]

Thank you Cherrie,
Your presence and gracious words touch gently, bring my poem to life, and make it glow a little brighter.
I am working on a new poem today Cherrie and plan to display it soon.
I very much enjoy the warmth of your sweet words in poetic expression, and I completely agree.

Thank you for reading me Cherrie, I love your review,
Roth

[Robert Haigh]

The message presenting the poet as some kind of mystic, whose words can neither be stemmed nor denied, is a good one, I think. "He's a tree watered by beauty" - I like that. We may not all be great poets, but we all have something to say, and hopefully, someone willing to read our words. I enjoyed this poem very much.

[Roth Jordain]

Hi Robert,
You are my first reader and your review is everything a poet could wish for in thanks and encouragement.
For a newcomer I indeed feel blessed.
I agree with you, "presenting the poet as some kind of mystic," I very much like the image of your interpretation, a fit descriptive for what many of us poets would wish to aspire, I'd say.

Thank you Robert for your inspiring visit,
Roth