Dark Pleasure

part of the late night poetry with Rossen collection

           Her crippling stare is like a warning

                         The deep circles swirl around those

                                Dark still  eyes

                         She eliminates souls from close encounters

                 Somehow I stand within her electric blue mist

           Moonlight  slips through the half open blinds

            Her naked goth pail body, half in soft shadow

              lust pulls my focus out of the blur

              Sending blood to the awaiting member

                 The soft gleam of light from

                 the side of her breast

          
                         Taunting my will...
       

       Both frozen still within this cold empty space

Without a word... I Undress...

With a sharp stare she delivers her warning

Some time passes

Speechless... Ive been muted

I lay on my back on the hardwood floor

Close my eyes

Holding my breath... I wait to see what will...

Soft stroking finger tips,

Across my eyelids

I can feel her exhale... absent of warmth

Wet darting feeling on the nape of my throat

My heart is heaving not beating

My hands rest... open palms, knuckles touching the floor..

She is.. devouring me...

Author's Note

who is she to you?

Reviews

[Rory CJ Frankson]

************************************************************* All Stars *****************************

SMOKIN... as I was reading I was really impressed with the staging of this piece Ros, it holds areas of real mistique, intrugue and sultry suspence.
I like what PJ mention about the Vampirish feel and it being suptle and not outwardly stated. To mention in messaging that there is like a suspension between some of these phrases, that leave us rather breathless. Erotic, without going over the top and I like that. Over all, I would have to say this is a great write and I think you have a niche here that suits your writing style... this piece is delicious.
Right On / Write On!
Romon in Review

[Emily B]

she is fear

that black darkness that wraps itself around you and squeezes all the air out of your lungs . . .

[Aidz]

Alluring write indeed.. :)

[Siddhartha]

A tinge of the erotic...swiftly devoured by a wave of the gothic...wonderful write...

[Stef Outsiders]

sensual but hot... love the image i get from reading this...

[Adel Eyes]

nice job 2 sets of readers both having different visions.........and that my friends is what writing is all about

[SpokenWord]

Well she sounds a very alluring and sexy vampire to me. Maybe I have been watching too much true blood. Such a sweet way for the man to meet his end I suppose. Very sensual writing with that touch of the supernatural.

[hanzabonanza]

love this poem- whispering lines with a dark soul of beating lust and desire. For me she is all the women I could never have

[FireWoman]

Alluring R, it drew me in immediately. Oh, and I think she is me about 15 years ago.

[WyckedDreams]

excellent writing. deep erotic visuals.

[Narnie]

Excellent - and the elipses give it an added dreamlike state.