Half-Empty

When all of your dreams are falling apart
When all that you love are breaking your heart
When all of the stars are fading away
Somewhere, somehow you'll find a way

When nobody knows that you are there
When nobody seems to even care
When nothing to say but "How's the day?"
It's time to sleep in a lazy day

When they try to tell us we're too young
When they try to shout and cut your tongue
When they try to kill you while you play
Run and utter what you want to say

Author's Note

Please review and rate my poem. Thank you :)

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I think the pathos you convey in this piece is excellent. As a poem it needs some crafting. Rhyming poetry can lead a new writer into the trap of writing into the rhyme. In other words finding rhymes and trying to fit the narrative to it. Try free verse for a while as you obviously have a talent able to capture emotion and convey it.

[Ross Emerson Realino]

Thanks for your advice :D
Yeah, I sometimes do a free verse :D

[Anjali]

A very empowering write! I don't know about the others, but it seriously inspired me. Keep it up!😊

[Ross Emerson Realino]

Thanks!! You may also read my other works too :)

[Anjali]

You're welcome, and of course I would love to read your other works as well!

[boygene borice]

The first stanza, is inspirational which makes the poem beautiful.

[Ross Emerson Realino]

Thanks a lot :D

[Darling]

Wonderful words to describe how we feel unnoticed in this vast world. It does seem that sometimes nobody cares. Well written piece. Darling.

[Ross Emerson Realino]

Yeah, that's true :)
Tnx for the review :D
You may also read and review my other poems too ;)

[CAPOLAVORO]

I like this one. It tells us a lot of things about being persevere and positiveness. Thank you for sharing.

[Ross Emerson Realino]

Oh, thanks for your review :) You may also look and read my other poems too :D

[CAPOLAVORO]

I will. :)

[Valentine]

I like the lines and the flow.Valentine

[Ross Emerson Realino]

Thanks a lot :)

[Joey Nizz]

Great words of encouragement!
Thanks for sharing

[Ross Emerson Realino]

Thanks a lot :)

[Joey Nizz]

your welcome ^^

[Surya]

Haha, if that happens you definitely wins and finds who you are....
Well, a beautiful darkness described here...
Simple though its wonderful..

[Ross Emerson Realino]

Hahaha,, thanks for your review :D

[Abraham George]

truly encouraging and i like the way you simply says these things.

keep going my friend

[Ross Emerson Realino]

Oh, thanks ;)

[Najam Us Saher]

I like the last line. I didn't imagine you would write that. Loved the poem. It was inspiring and encouraging.

[Ross Emerson Realino]

Thanks a lot :D

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome

[Abraham George]

Najam thanks for sharing beautiful work

[Najam Us Saher]

I knew it you would like it.