Forever

Isn't love such a beautiful thing?

I love the way you look at me

With those soft and vacant eyes

I adore your soft satin lips

Bluer than the skies

When you entwine

Your fingers with mine

The world turns into gold

Even though 

You've lost your glow

And your hands are limp and cold

I love the feeling of your chest

And the red rose that blooms upon it

 I miss the beats beneath your breast

But I can live without it

I hold the knife that's dressed in red

My, I am so clever!

For as you lay in your grassy bed

You belong to me forever

Author's Note

I had trouble with the last line, so I want to know which version you think is better:
"You belong to me forever" or "I've made you mine forever"

Reviews

[Natalie Dieudonne]

This was a really cool piece. The ending is awesome. Its a nice twist that you don't see coming

Nice :)

[Rose Diamond]

Thank you! :)

[Heather]

I loved this! Especially the twist at the ending!

[Rose Diamond]

Thank you, I'm thrilled that you enjoyed it! :)

[pinkunicorn]

I like it! Abit creepy at the end, but that's what makes it good. Keep writing!

[Maham A]

The poem's pretty cool! It really grasps the reader's attention and the ending just leaves you spellbound.

[Rose Diamond]

Thank you very much!

[Jackson H. Harley]

Very nice poem, a little strange, but in a cool way :p and with regards to the last line, I believe the one you have published sounds right :)

[Rose Diamond]

Thanks, I was going for something weird and strange :)

[Jackson H. Harley]

Your welcome :)