PUFFING AND PANTING ALL THE WAY HOME .....POOR OLD MR KETCHUP

What an evening it had been for poor old Mr Ketchup and his friends .

"Lets all take a trip down to Yellow-field market to buy some
shopping, answered Red pepper the cousin of haggis "
"Oh do get a move on complained Mr Ketchup its nearly 5 o'clock and its getting
very dark outside I shan't be able to see without my glasses, "He moaned.....
A little while later they were all struggling up the bum-pie road.
"How much longer now replied Mr Ketchup," his feet were killing him
and looked so washed out  and   definitely ready to put his feet up and watch his
favorite television program called the daisy family.
"Pew at last said Mr Ketchup with a big sigh of relief"
"You sit now haggis and Red Pepper, and let me be mother for a change"
At last every-one sat down slipping their tea Mr ketchup had a bad habit of
dipping his biscuits into his tea and making an awful mess of his jumper.
"Oh really do You have to eat your biscuit like that it is very rude of you.
A little while later and he apologized for his behavior.
Far away over the hill gleamed a beautiful sunset  and Mr Ketchup's friends
were in a hurry to catch a wee glimpse of it before it disappeared into the distance
" goodnight they all shouted"  Have a very nice evening  and be careful and well you can
work that one out for yourself...........    

Reviews

[Samuel Dickens]

A clever, entertaining story which has potential for lengthening. Children would enjoy it, as would very old children like me.

[LSS]

This reads almost like an allegory. It seems to want to go somewhere other than whimsy, but doesn't quite make it. I can see this in rewrite becoming a short story of fantasy, a story within a story, a moral that captures all of us in its normalcy as it expands.
Larry

[Leslie Philibert]

Funny clever writing that has been written with a wry, ironic humour, like bum-pie instead of bumpy, loads of zany British comedy here, good writing.

[ROSALIND]

thank you for your positive feedback it was very encouraging

[Marie]

Well, it sounds like Mr. Ketchup had a good time with his friends, even if he is untidy. I love all the English phrases and references in these stories, even if I don't understand all of them.