Haiku

Leslie's tribute to Ruth

 A bee sips nectar
 Deep red its in-Carnation
 sweet flower of love

Author's Note

This piece expresses a woman's love and appreciation for the inspiration and positive influence a friend has had on her life

Reviews

[Jane Smith]

With an effortless flow and poised flared, this is a finely crafted piece. : )

[Simon Welsh]

Love hurts ;) I like.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A stunning haiku indeed.

[Atthis Rose]

yes stunning indeed!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I love the Haiku form...as well as the Senryu. This is a little mixture of both, as it has the imagery of the Haiku and then the last line has the "feeling" of the Senryu. Such a starkly simple form, and yet so terribly difficult to do well. I have written many in my time (and had several published in the Boston Literary Review)--I went for about a year obssessed with writing only in this format. lol

So, love the concept, and love the execution. Nicely done.

[Aethereal]

That was beautiful. I enjoyed the double meaning of incarnation. I write it once again in another way which you may have as a gift: Here we have a happy bee!

"A bee sips nectar",
its crimson in-Carnation,
its sweet bloom of love.

[Atthis Rose]

Sweetie your mind just flows with ideas. I'll have more for you so i'll be able to see just how good you are this. ready for the challenge?

[Aethereal]

This is all about how good you are. You get what you get when you inspire me. If you want Genie to appear, then you must rub the magic poetic lamp in an innovative way.

[spunkyleo]

a beautifully written haiku. good job.

[Atthis Rose]

I'm happy you appreciated it