~Chapter 10~ New Allies

~Chapter 10~ New Allies

A Chapter by Rose
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A school that looks after and raises those who have been abandoned by their family just because they have supernatural abilities, and aren't truly human.

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~Chapter 10~ New Allies

All of us stood there in shock, wondering who these newcomers were. The boy seemed to have jet black hair - however, that may have just been what the coloured appeared like in the darkness - and emerald green eyes, that seemed to be willing to help whenever needed. The girl also seemed to have jet black hair - but it was actually silver, as the night sky had made her hair appear black - and golden brown eyes that sparkled in the dark. The boy was taller than the girl, but maybe that was just because he was older. Both of them slowly approached us, as the lights within the school ground turned on, revealing to us what they truly looked like.
"Who are you?" Jason questioned, a slight hint of anger in his tone, but mostly gratitude.
"I'm Kaito." The boy replied with a soft smile. "This is Alex." He continued to say, gesturing towards the younger female.
"Thanks for the help." Hiroki said, as the heads of the school suddenly appeared. They must've seen, or heard, what had happened.

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We had just been sitting in our office filling in the papers for the new students that were going to arrive today, when suddenly all the light in the school ground vanished. I had no clue what was going on, but I knew one thing, there was someone else here. I knew that as a few days ago I had seen the future, even though it hadn't been that far into the future, that someone would come to the school and when everything outside went dark, that was when they had arrived. I didn't know who it was, but I had a fair good idea who it may be.
"What's going on Amelia?" My husband, Aaron, questioned me, looking at me with his sapphire blue eyes. He may have only been human but he meant the world to me, and made me happy.
"It's the vision of the future I had a few days ago," I started to say, looking into his sapphire blue eyes with my blood red eyes, "someone is here." I told him. He didn't need to say anything as I knew what he was thinking. Without any more need for words, we headed outside to see what was going on. So by the time we arrived, whoever had caused the darkness to fall on the school had vanished, and the two new students had arrived.

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"Welcome." Amelia said. She was a tall woman with long golden hair with slight red highlights within it, which worked well considering her dark blood red eyes. I was surprised that Aaron wasn't afraid of her, seeing as he was a human and she was a vampire. Aaron was just as tall as Amelia, but had dark brown hair and sapphire blue eyes, but could be mean and get anyone to be scared of him when he needed it.
"I'm Aaron and this is my lovely wife, Amelia, and we would just like to welcome you both to the school. We'll get someone to show you each to your dorms, then in the morning you both come to our office and we will give you your lesson plans." Aaron said with a smile, and with that said, both him and Amelia headed back inside. They were always the kind of teachers that would focus more on their paperwork, and make sure to never get behind on it.

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We all waited until we knew for sure the heads had left, before we split up; girls going to their dorm with Alex and boys to their dorm with Kaito. We had all introduced ourselves to each other before we had decided that it was all a little too late and that each of us needed some well deserved rest.

That night was one of the only nights were we all slept soundly and nobody got disturbed in anyway - except me with Chinatsu's snoring. However, seeing as I had to put up with her as my sister, I had grown used to it, and was able to drown it out - literally. I would throw water on her to wake her up, listen to her complain about it for 5 minutes, while not truly listening and falling asleep instead. She was also used to it, and when I was sleeping, she would laugh to herself lightly - she always told me - and then fall asleep herself. She may have been a pain in the butt sometimes, but if she wasn't then it wasn't her. The true loveable character that is my sister.


© 2013 Rose


Author's Note

Rose
The title will probably change, if anyone can think of a better suggestion for me. This is a story of my own creation. Please tell me if you notice any obvious corrections - grammar, spelling, tense - and let me know what you think of it. If there is anything you think can be changed in anyway, please message me the suggestions, and I will take them into consideration. Thank you.

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I never really did understand vampires. Ok, they bite the neck of someone and drink their blood, and then they may or may not become vampires themselves - and - I'm not sure how you can make a vampire from someone if you drink all their blood. What are they powered by ? :)

The descriptions you have of the characters are lavish and lovely, very nice. Definitely well done there.

There is a method used in writing that can enhance the clarity and readability, for instance you have:

"It's the vision of the future I had a few days ago," I started to say, looking into his sapphire blue eyes with my blood red eyes, "someone is here." I told him.

It's just a practice, but you could change that to:

"It's the vision of the future I had a few days ago," I started to say. Then I looked into his sapphire blue eyes with my blood red own. "Someone is here." I told him.

It's okay to have a period outside quotes, you can still continue the thoughts of a speaker even then but you have a greater division in the speech content making it easier to read without relying on the comma consistently to make a long run-on sentence.

Hope This Helps !


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rose

11 Years Ago

Thank you, I have always had a habit of over-using the comma too much within my writing, that is why.. read more
dw817

11 Years Ago

UBetcha. Try to writing things in past tense as well. This helps the flow of a story. For instance, .. read more
Rose

11 Years Ago

Thanks a lot.



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I never really did understand vampires. Ok, they bite the neck of someone and drink their blood, and then they may or may not become vampires themselves - and - I'm not sure how you can make a vampire from someone if you drink all their blood. What are they powered by ? :)

The descriptions you have of the characters are lavish and lovely, very nice. Definitely well done there.

There is a method used in writing that can enhance the clarity and readability, for instance you have:

"It's the vision of the future I had a few days ago," I started to say, looking into his sapphire blue eyes with my blood red eyes, "someone is here." I told him.

It's just a practice, but you could change that to:

"It's the vision of the future I had a few days ago," I started to say. Then I looked into his sapphire blue eyes with my blood red own. "Someone is here." I told him.

It's okay to have a period outside quotes, you can still continue the thoughts of a speaker even then but you have a greater division in the speech content making it easier to read without relying on the comma consistently to make a long run-on sentence.

Hope This Helps !


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rose

11 Years Ago

Thank you, I have always had a habit of over-using the comma too much within my writing, that is why.. read more
dw817

11 Years Ago

UBetcha. Try to writing things in past tense as well. This helps the flow of a story. For instance, .. read more
Rose

11 Years Ago

Thanks a lot.
cool

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rose

11 Years Ago

Thanks sis
Twilight_Starlight

11 Years Ago

np

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