Ignored

This is just a random poem that I came up with. I guess you could say it is how I feel everyday, except when this person is near.

I have nothing to do

Except spend all my time with you

The other half of me

The person who I wish to be

I wish to be free

I want to be the true me

The person who I truly am

Instead of the person buried in the sand

Nobody knows where I am, or who

Nobody, except you

 

I'm ignored by everyone

However, there is someone

Someone who I can talk

Someone who doesn't just look at me and walk

The person I can call a friend

The person who stays by my side until the very end.

Author's Note

I hope this poem is alright, I'm not that good at poetry.

Reviews

[Zombie Waffle]

Not many technical mistakes here, except the line that reads "Someone who I can talk".
As a sentence - and it doesn't seem to make up a part of a larger sentence - it makes no sense. Try "Someone I can talk to" or "Someone to whom I can talk".

And please, pleases, please try to use some punctuation.

[Rose]

I have tried to fit punctuation into my poems, but somehow I can't seem the find the right places where they shoud be placed. However, I will try my hardest to put in some punctuation next time.

[Rose]

*to find
*be put

[T. Val]

The feeling of being ignored is something we've all felt, and it sucks every time. Good work here Rose.

[Rose]

Thanks and everyone has felt ignored at somepoint in their lives.

[Black Rose]

Nice poem, I really liked it.

[Rose]

Thanks.