Family For Life

This is a poem that expresses how I feel to have the family and friends that I have grown to know, and how much they mean to me. They will know who they are. <3

They are everything I need

Everything I depend

If they were never around

My life, I would feel, would end.

 

To make me laugh

To make me smile

I wish that they would never leave

If only even for a while.

 

They are the people who make my day worth living

They are the people who I know truly care

Every once in a while, whenever I'm down

I know, I know that they are always there.

 

Love and Life,

That's what we share,

For one another,

Even if we are never truly there.

Author's Note

I'm not very good at poems, so I would like any reviews expressing what I have done wrong and what people all think of this. I hope it explains how I am feeling, and what certain people mean to me. :3

Reviews

[dw817]

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Family. It's so funny when we grow up we say such simple things as kids like, "I hate you !" or, "I never want to see you again !"

And we have no idea of the kind of damage we are doing then. And now today, with our parents having passed on, you'd give anything, anything in the world to bite back those words and just say, "I'm sorry Mommy." and get a nice hug.

Love, Life, Live. Love everyday of your life, Live for anything and everything, no matter how great or small. Our time on this precious Sapphire Earth is limited. Spend it wisely, but do spend it.

[Rose]

I understand, thank you very much for the review.

[dw817]

Sure, hold on tight, life still has quite a-ways to go ! :)

[Frieda P]

It's good, you get your point across quite gracefully, I think it just needs a little jazzing up...sounds like you could be telling me this over a cup of tea. Take a few key words and try changing them out next time you do a poem, it can make all the difference. Still an enjoyable read.

[Rose]

Thank you, I will maybe give that a try, as I don't tend to write many poems, I only write them to express what I truly feel.

[Frieda P]

That's where we all start off, I think you have a good foundation, just need to punch it up a bit....my pleasure :-)

[Rose]

Next time I write another poem, I shall give it a try.

[RapidReviewer]

touching ! I like poetry and this is good poetry !

[Rose]

Thanks.

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

Firstly, this flows nicely and very easy to read. It's popularly said that poetry is supposed to be understood yet not at the same time. So I would recommend that you add a mystery factor here but overall I love the poem.

You easily place into words what you feel or rather you just write what you feel and that's great.

This poem is simple and straight to the point and I like that

Nice piece

[Rose]

Thank you. I don't write many poems, so I don't know how to word them well, or put in essence of mystery into them, I just plainly say what I feel, but not fully.

[The dark story]

Well I should say that this is one of your best piece of writing I have ever read…it.s really touching and meaningful and impressive…you have expressed your solicitude and love for those people very nicely.keep it up!!!

[Rose]

Thank you, I appreciate it. I cam't do poems very well, but whenever something has happened, and I have no way of expressing my feelings, I struggle and strive to find the right words to say and put them into a short poem. I do love those people I'm aiming this poem at, and I hope they feel the same for me.

[The dark story]

if your love is true and pure...then you don't have to worry that whether those people know that you care for them or not...'cause they can sing the song of your heart..and that's the true characteristic of love!!..and yeah diction is very important in the poem so all you need is a little practice that's all!!:)

[Rose]

Thanks.

[junaid altaf]

the emotions are perfect only the words need to be chosen technically.......
and yes itz goood..........

[Rose]

Thank you

[Jynx]

>///< awes ^~^ I luvs you too :D also awesome poem ^^

[Rose]

Yay! *huggles* love you more, and thanks :3 Btw, chu ish cute when chu blush ;P

[Jynx]

MON THEN BIATCH!!! ILL PURE SMASH YOU!!!! XD

[Rose]

Lol! *huggles tightly* mine :3

[Jynx]

t(._.t)

[Rose]

*giggles* mew =^~^=

[Jynx]

xD aye awright then

[Rose]

Yay! *huggles*

[Jynx]

XD

[The Fallen]

This is amazing!!! It flows so nicely and I can feel the love you have for your friends and family!! Wonderfully written

[Rose]

Thank you very much, I was trying to let those feelings through. Hehe.

[Perri]

Aww..Super-kawaii! =3
Really sweet poem^^

[Rose]

Thanks. There no mistakes? xD And it relates to you as well, you make my day worth living for and I know that you are always there for me, especially when I'm down. :3