life changes

I feel obliged to go over some of my old work and fix some errors.

First Draft:

runing playing luaghing singing so carefree i could do anything

i remember that feeling so well to get that back i would give everything

Innocence takin away life changes forced to be made

Escaping thinking innocence could be taking back if a new life i could create

A fateful choice indeed for that made the innoncence even more fleeting

Emptiness thats what changes in life gave back to me

I decided to take back my life innocence or not this had to be

Love thats what life changes rewarded me

Recently Revised addition:

Life Changes

Running, playing, laughing, and singing 

So carefree, I believed I could do anything

I remember that feeling and to get that back I would give everything

Innocence taken away, life changes forced to be made

Escaping, thinking innocence could be taken back if a new life I could have

A fateful choice indeed, for that made the innocence even more fleeting

Emptiness, that’s what changes in life gave back to me

I decided to take back my life innocence or not this had to be

Love that’s what life changes rewarded me

 

Reviews

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

so much love is within this poem. i love the way you put it together with every part of a person's life. great write.

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

doesn't it suck when you have to grow up and realize that life can be s**t? yea lame. it's what you make it. i really like the image you placed in my head i like this ;o)