Tense Cuddling

I wrote this after a date, that was very frustrating for me. There is a description of a sexual act, so just be prepared.

I wanna go down on you

You have no clue how bad

My mind is a blur with fantasies

Where I ravish you

Swirled in hot steamy passion

Your soft brown sugar skin

Melting at my touch

Your hot caramel center

Goddamnit baby girl

I don’t wanna push you

So gently you lay in my arms

Too shy to put all your weight on me

Too scared to ever make the first move

So like a deer caught in head lights

You just lay in my arms

Uncomfortably

With awkward small talk on your tongue

When it should be you on mine

 

 

Author's Note

Wanna is there for diction, but other than if you find any spelling/grammar issues please correct me. If you have any critique, please leave it. I am always trying to improve. Thank you for reading and I hope you enjoy.

Reviews

[Lorry]

Sometimes we meet someone who over-rides our senses and leaves us wanting to throw caution to the wind, laugh in the face of reckless abandon and for want of a better phrase, just go for it....Sometimes the other should get better at reading the lines, so that no one walks away thinking "Well, that wasn't what it should have been."
As one of those male type persons however, I would just add that women should never underestimate men's stupidity and what is blatantly obvious to a woman in a whisper, sometimes needs to be screamed to a man, sometimes with klaxons and flashing warning signs thrown in. We, can be that dumb. (Note to other male type people...sorry guys, but I ain't taking the fall on my own)
Beautifully worded frustrations.

[Rose-Pearl]

lol, so true. I face that in my current relationship. Shyness in a women can be cute, yet it does cause some hang ups. Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Sarah]

This is such an accurate description from a woman's perspective. I can remember being on dates, and wanting to make a move, but I was too nervous to. Laying uncomfortably in a guys arms. It's all so realistic, and I can see a guy thinking those thoughts as he's just trying to make the girl comfortable. Great poem!

[Rose-Pearl]

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[Relic]

Thank you for alluding to and including in your tags lesbian. The vividness here is highlighted by your detail. That makes it much easier for the one reading to understand and hook into the emotional fire you display and for whom.

My only question: did the paper you wrote on go on fire from the heat you've given off through your writing of this? It certainly is a heated poem that grabbed me and held me.

A wonderful excursion through your thoughts. Thanks for that. :)

[Rose-Pearl]

I'm glad you enjoyed it :) and I make sure to tag lesbian in my poems to give a better idea of the relationships I'm describing. It certainly is a heated poem, now if only I could bring some of that heat into my relationship, lol.