Oh Once You Left

     

Oh once you left,

I fell deep down,

Lost my path,

Strayed to far away.

I heard the calling,

Begging and pleading,

I didn't dare answer,

For fear of screamin.

Oh once you left,

I just couldn't breathe, 

You had gone so far,

And left me behind.

Can't breathe,

Just want to scream,

Oh I'm pleading, 

Just come back to me! 

Reviews

[WynterPhoenix]

I know this feeling all too well, though at the current moment for different reasons, so I guess this poem could work for breakups and/or death.

Very well worded. Great job!

[Ripple of Aqua]

Desperate and intrigue

[VelvetRosetta]

If only the ones we want in our lives would do just that...Come back!
I know this feeling all to well!

Keep em coming

[Aly Jones]

I love how it's about a breakup. (I also love the picture you used.) I can't tell you why, but I just really like this poem.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Lovely... and u underestimate your writing, pssh lolz. Your'e great. :) This is indeed emotional, really heart touching and grabs at the heart.

[Fire Tulip]

I can feel how you are feeling through these words...simply amazing

[Jeremy Baker]

The desperation in this is all too vivid and real. Good work!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Very insightful and feelings are spot on...conveyed so well !!

[stars are far]

ohhh this was so emotional i loved it
and the picture is amazing ..