Black Train to Hell.

Took the black train to hell,

Passed the tormented souls,

Cried out my sorrow.

The black train to hell,

Became my home.

Punished for eternity.

Took the black train to hell,

To live among the souls,

See the liar's,

Killers,

And cheats.

Black train to hell,

My tormented home. 

Reviews

[WynterPhoenix]

Love the wording in this one! Great job :D

[Thea]

Aw, beautiful dark poem...Neatly penned...

[Fire Tulip]

Full of dark energy...really enjoyed this

[stars are far]

this was so dark ... greatly done :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Stunning dark poem...makes valid points..excellent !!!

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Oh man this is freaking amazing, I loved this
I thought it rocked.

[Jupiter Jazz]

Loved it! It was dark and creepy. Like something on Twilight Zone =)



9th line, 3rd word: "...lier's" --> "liar's"

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Well wow... this one is different, and really awesome. I love how you wrote the train, nice picture for the poem and nice poem itself.