Full Of Sin

'Wrote for the sin I and everyone else has done at some stage in time around the world'

My sinful thoughts,

My sinful words,

Cold and hard ,

Just like steel,

Bent on melting me into it.

Sin for my every breath

Sin in my head,

Sin on my skin,

Flowing through my very veins.

Sin for my world,

Sin for my comfort,

Sin for my very life. 

Author's Note

I wrote this when thinking of the sin I have done and the sin other people do throughout the world. Any grammar problems or room for change let me know, thank you :)

Reviews

[李[A]]

Aww... I love the repetition of the "Sin" phrase to emphasis the "Full" of Sin part of your title. Also, I found this thematic element to be quite covert, but kind of aboveboard in terms of understanding. Also, I enjoyed the way you used body parts to represent the overall theme. A good word for this poem would be absolution: a washing of the poem. This could be used in context of complete sinfulness. Anyways, nonetheless great job. Yay!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

A powerful write, with tons said in it even without being said within the lines you wrote. Really nice... love how you did the bold words, even more of a impact to the writing. I like how you compared and used steel in this and listing parts of the body as well. Really a great piece that leads to interesting thinking for one to be left with. I like this.

[Jupiter Jazz]

Too true, mate. (Aussie accent)
We all just a ball of sin, de end.
9th line, spelled the wrong "threw" => through
Yosh!

[nono]

Sin has always been one of my favorite words...I don't know why. I guess a three letter word that holds so much power behind it. Don't think it could mean much until your old enough to understand? Anyways....This poem is well written. "Flowing through my very veins." I like that line. Kind of gives a since that its always with you, and you can't get rid of it. Its such a powerful word. Sin.

[VelvetRosetta]

Oh my and pleany of sin there is!!! The world is festered with it...seems like a contagious disease...and its so easy to fall into.
Cheers!