Dancing Along Ropes

A Poem by Darkest Rose

Dancing along the ropes,

Looking into blackness,

One careless mistake and I fall.

Darkness awaits,

Calling with that raspy voice

'Come to me oh child of light'

I shake,

I stutter,

I prance and I leap

But what for?

I made my mistakes

I rose and I fell,

I worried and fussed.

But my mistake,

Was when I leapt too far.

© 2011 Darkest Rose

Author's Note

This just came to my head so I posted it up, any grammar issues or changes to be made please let me know. I'd love to know your views on this piece of writing :)

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Daniel88Batson

Wish that idea was mine!
Grrrrr!

Posted 13 Years Ago

Ripple of Aqua

So very precise, and graceful.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Starry Eyed

Decriptive, keeping you reader lured in! Keep onwriting great poems!

Posted 13 Years Ago

Victoria PoetryBunny

Very good, i love the imagery of this poem as well as the picture you posted with the poem... really nice. I love how you wrote this line:
"Calling with that raspy voice"...
and also the last lines:
"But my mistake,
Was when I leapt too far."
... great write.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Jupiter Jazz

Love it Love it Love it!! Love the words and the helpful pic.

Minor critique, last line, you have the wrong "to"

Posted 13 Years Ago

Rae	Very open for interpretation. I like it. Keep on writing! Posted 13 Years Ago Very open for interpretation. I like it. Keep on writing! Rating /100

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Added on July 29, 2011
Last Updated on July 29, 2011

Author

Darkest Rose

Ireland

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Hi...Well I love writing,mainly poetry and sometimes short story's,I love walking in the woods during the summer and the spring it sometimes gives me idea's for writing.I mainly base my poetry on thin.. more..