Brought Me Down

You brought me down

Trapped me in my mind

No place to run,

No place to hide

Just there,

Trapped,

Alone,

Begging for forgiveness 

Begging for release

Needing light,

Needing love,

Needing you.

You brought me down

Trapped me in my mind

You lost me here

So you find me.

Author's Note

If there is any grammar issues or anywhere I can change to make it better let me know
Thank you :)

Reviews

[Jeremy Baker]

Font and structure and clever and used well to emphasise the message. I liked this a lot!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I like how you used the colors, alternating the red and black with the lines... also like how the emotion built up and made a impact at the end:
"You brought me down
Trapped me in my mind
You lost me here
So you find me."
... that's really good, i like this.

[Jupiter Jazz]

Emotional and intense

[Rae]

Wow very emotional, keep writing!!

[AndyJCash]

This tugged at me so much, like a great deal. Those last two lines especially, a kind of redemption is needed but whether the protagonist gets it or not is unknown. They need saving, and that really got to me :P Great write, really enjoyed it

[Kiri Nells]

Great write! I very much enjoyed the poem itself and your use of font color into the structure. :)

[Starry Eyed]

I don't think there is any grammar mistakes, but then again, im not a grammar expert, lovely write :) Thanks for sharing this.