Stars

Its a poem about how stars are so amazing and selfless but is that all or there is something they hide?

Stars are giving light to us
Falling just to watch us have hope
But
Aren't they hidden in darkness too
How are they so amazing
To be in the dark
And still shine and be hope for us

Sometimes lost in darkness
They themselves disappear
Is it just that
Or are they hating is now
Is the love they have for us fading away
Why do they love us from afar
When they know
All we need is
A hug and a shoulder to cry on

Why do they come out in darj
And leave every morning
For us to see
The beauty of the world
All by ourselves

Are they really so selfless
Or are they just too scared?
To see the ugliness the world carries
Once the night vanishes

Are they insecure
Just like us
That once we find
Someone better, we will
Leave them unloved forever.....

Author's Note

Ignore grammar and lemme know how to make it better?

Reviews

[Garrett Leatherman]

Love the personification of stars here. Also the tone sounds like a little kid trying to make sense of things. Very nice.

I'm not very qualified to give formal critiques, but I would say perhaps organize the formatting a little more so it reads smoother. But first, let me ask, is there a particular reason you formatted it as such?

Nicely done! Keep going!

[Rookie12]

I formatted it in this way cause us teens often dont get things smooth so I want.my writings to show that things which are not smooth make sense too.the last part shows my persnol fears or any other person's insecurity as a way to tell them its not wrong to be insecure!

[Wesley Sui]

Love the way you gave human characteristics to something that is unworldly and even some holy. The structure and the flow of the poem is very nice.

For critiques, I have have none because i do not have formal experience but the poem is very nice poem. Keep going!

[Rookie12]

Thankyou very much for taking time to read and review my poem. Am glad you do like it.