Dark waters

How calm it seems
On the surface?
Its coolness
Tempting.
I could get lost
in these dark pools
The depths of which
I cannot measure
Or perceive.
Perceptions varies
to a degree
with regard to heart and mind
I contemplate my hesitation
Which keeps me
Standing on the edge
of reasons
Possibilities
That everything
that could go wrong
-would go wrong.
It’s not my nature
To look before I leap
But, how well
Do I trust these dark eyes?
When all I see,
Is my reflection
peering back at me-
with uncertainty.
And certainly,
I must take every precaution.
A few steps back-
Consider the whole picture
And not just
the box.
Although the package
Is pretty-
I just can’t take that chance.
Tempting fate
One; too many times
My faith is shaken.
A dance
With serendipity
Is a bit overdue
and Lady Luck,
Well, she just test my patience
Teasing me with hope,
before dashing it away
Stirring these dark waters
During dark times
I have been known
to be allured by the unknown
Inured to losses
But It would be, far too great.
I will fall back
before I fall in
and maybe,
I just dodged a bullet
with this one.

Author's Note

#prose #mystery

Reviews

[ashw]

I just picked one of your poems at random, and this was great! Great writing, captured me right away...I love how you are reasoning with yourself throughout the peace. Weighing temptation against reality, wanting to take a risk, but not necessarily willing or able to do so. I get so jealous reading poems like this because it nearly impossible for me to write without some kind of rhyming pattern, I always end up losing the flow of a piece without rhyme. Loved it.

[RomaJ]

Opps..accidently posted that without finishing haha...yes rhyming is an artform. A skill, although I more comfotable with it, I still am learning to perfect. But I see you have mastered quite well. Thank you for your review.

[RomaJ]

and perceptive insight on this piece

[terry smith]

ah sometimes the road not taken leaves the tank full but the soul empty...I drive forward as fast as I can and if it goes sour I mix it with whiskey and back over it a few times!! very well written!

[RomaJ]

Hahaha I will remember that. Warms my heart, the thoughts of whiskey. Whew.

[Valentine]

Very well written. Your word usage is great. Valentine

[RomaJ]

Thank you Valentine. I'm glad you thought so. I appreciate it.

[andrew mitchell]

So damn alluring, enticing this write that holds you gaze in wonderment and where the reader must travel following your chosen route! . So well executed RomaJ. extreme poetic brilliance for me!

[RomaJ]

Thank you for this amazing review, Andrew. You're brilliant.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes thinking outside the box is smart...because the wrapping looks good, but the heart remembers the paper cuts...and decides not to unwrap...
because what is inside could be more heartbreak.

[RomaJ]

I blush, j. You've unravelled my mystery. In such a beautiful way. Now that is poetry.

[Perkele.7885]

I am a risk taker in life by what I consider my odds of reasonable probability. MANY TIMES I have walked away from what I thought, were good odds but, my INKLING said no. I make my choice(s) in a couple of minutes of thought or I do not make it at all. i just walk away and save all this thought energy for another process later on or for another day.

[RomaJ]

My sentiments exactly. It is always wise to listen to your gut feeling and just walk away...it saves us from alot heartaches and headaches...Thank you for your wisdom and insight.

[ANTO]

At the start you descriptives are for a singular entity but then they are for plural. I think this can be confusing.

I love the whole self talk and the reasoning in this one, showing the workings of the mind and the desire tempered to the Nth degree by hesitancy brought on by pain of past experiences.




"But It would be, far too great." - I feel the inclusion of the word fall would suit here and would set up a triplet of lines with fall in
eg;
"But It would be far too great a fall.
(So) I will fall back
before I fall in"

Loved the final line too.
Top write Roma J

[RomaJ]

Thank you for your very insightful and helpful review, Anto. I always appreciate your thoughts.
read moreThank you for your very insightful and helpful review, Anto. I always appreciate your thoughts.
It is a bit confusing. It's a mystery. A metaphor about a "metaphor" ahem..ha
I blush that you actually read this...
"dark waters" the unknown...
Their beauty can be alluring, enticing even.
Tempting even the strongest of hearts..
fall back before you fall in (love)
and risked everything.
Losses that would be far too great.
....:)
Sorry it's confusing. My heart, mind, and body were confused when I wrote this lol
Thank you for reading.

[ANTO]

You're welcome Roma J. The writing is all yours and I am just making suggestions that you can use (if you wish) - I dont always get it right...lol
thank you my friend

[ANTO]

oh, by the way Roma, most of your reply was lost so forgive me if i didnt seem to reply properly