Unexpected

She always felt lost in the world. Always felt like she didn't belong and was struggling to just become someone. Everyone knew Saz as the funny girl that makes everyone laugh. But what whirled in her mind was something else. 

     After a Saturday night out with friends Saz was heading home it was about 12:43 A.M. coming up from the F train on Caroll St in Brooklyn, New York. As the was walking the three blocks home she felt a presence behind her and that it was one of many thousands that live in New York. She didn't have much thought about it and raised the volume to "Lost In Japan" on her AirPods. After a few minutes later something made her turn around and there he was a tall, handsome, Channing Tatum looking male. They exchanged a awkward glance at each other and she turned back around and was walking away. 

     Finally Saz is at her doorstep, walking up to her brownstone house her parents had bought her. She's fishing around her Louis Vuitton purse for her keys and after a brief moment she finds them. Turning the key to her apartment and "BAM" something hits her hard on her head and before you know it she's on the floor. 

      Saz wakes up with a heavy and pounding headache and realizes her hands and feet are tied in her own bed, and guess who's right in front of her? The Channing Tatum look alike. 

Author's Note

I know I'm not the best writer or a grammar perfectionist, I'm just a college student writing for fun :)

Reviews

[Agyani]

Hey
I was hoping you would not leave me hanging at such a crucial point. There is a whole world of possibilities from where you've left things! I would like to know what happens next so that I can know Saz better :)

A few things you can work on (in addition to a sequel or extending this story I hope!) is the grammar here and a bit more of 'painting the picture'. Grammar is important because it helps maintain continuity. The reader can focus on the story better. As for context, well, you could show Saz more than people around her can see her. She wants to be known, right? Why not tell us a bit more about her? You could use her feelings on seeing the Channing Tatum lookalike to show more of her personality. You could show her thought process and character by showing how she interacts with others and reacts to situations. These are just a few things from the top of my head. You can come up with your own ways of doing so. And the more you do both of these things, the more you will enjoy writing. We all do it for fun initially ;)

Oh and, don't put yourself down so much by talking of yourself like so in your Author note. You will find people who talk down to you, so why add yourself to that brigade? Besides, grammar perfectionist isn't required for being a good writer. Don't take away the jobs of editors and grammar software developers in this world of increasing unemployment!