Access Denied

Experimental/Prose

Still repeatedly swiping that card
blaming the worn magnetic strip
Never once has it occurred to you
this account has been closed

Author's Note

When the past comes knocking...
This is about a (real life) monster I have written about in other pieces that destroyed both myself and my life. And yet... Even now on occasion, due to circumstances, I have to have dealings with him.

Reviews

[SteveB]

Well done! I love the analogy between bank accounts and relationships. I also love that another equally fair reading could be opportunities lost for any of a number of reasons. The self-delusion and denial are well expressed in such a concise and tight piece.
A pleasure to read this.

[Rogue]

Thank you, Steve for such a wonderful review. I truly appreciate that. :)

[Zia Doyle]

Clever analogy. You captured a complex relationship that is lingering past an expiry date with economy and finesse. I loved the brevity of it.

[AquaWater5674]

I agree with Steve..
Very short and to the point
Yet says so much
You are an intriguing writer

[Tate Morgan]

hmmlet me guess your ex buried you in debt.That could be a story unto itself

[Rogue]

True, that would be a whole other piece. More than likely the size of War and Peace too.
Thanks, Tate. :)

[Ian Robinson]

I like this. It was the first thing I read when I joined. I meant to review it at the time. Good metaphor.

[Rogue]

Thank you, Ian. I appreciate you both reading and remembering it. :)

[Chris]

So many levels to fit so many perceptions. And even more when you take into account life experience.

[Rogue]

-smile-
The reader is free to apply it to whatever in life they may find it suits. As I myself have. The Author's Note on this one was to make sure there was no misunderstandings due to circumstances occurring here at the time.
Thank you, Dear for your thoughtful words here. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Such a concise write, and yet so absolutely relatable and powerful. Sometimes people just can't help themselves...they keep "swiping that card", and attempting to weasel their way back into our good graces. I have had a few relationships/friendships such as this...and sadly, I have closed, reopened and closed accounts multiple times--metaphorically speaking. Well done and well thought out.

[Rogue]

I admit, there are times I want to be evil like they are in movies and just snatch it and cut it in half.
Thank you, Sarah for your thoughts and for reading. :)

[rhythm&blues]

I can truly relate to this one at the moment, nice work.

[Rogue]

Sorry to read you have to go through it. :(
Thank you R&B.

[Samuel Dickens]

Ohhhhhh. I'm a bit slow on the uptake. Thought it was about a poor money manager at first. Now I get it. Yeah, don't even expose your slot to that one.

[Rogue]

Hahahahahaha
Sam, I always love your reviews. :)

[Ken Simm.]

Going back to use what we thought we had and should have left. Muliple layers in such concise writing. I am envious that you can do this.

[Rogue]

-smile-
Thank you for that, my friend. It meant a lot coming from someone as gifted/talented as you are. I am humbled, truly.

[Ken Simm.]

I think my reply has got to be Round Objects and big hairy ones at that Pshaw!

[Rogue]

Hahahahahaha
I am truly glad to see you returned from your trip.