Blinders

Do you see me as I pass you by?
A momentary shadow out of the corner of your eye
Do you hear me as I draw near?
The softest sound of sighs as a wind whispering in your ear
Do you smell me as I enter the room?
Enveloping you in scents mistaken for the gardens perfume
Do you feel me as I touch your warm skin?
Caress resembling a cool breeze bringing shivers now and again

I am the past you do not know
A present you are unable to share
The future you will never realize

For, you don't really see me at all..

Reviews

[quinfinn]

here's the thing about the invisible people....they are the humble, meek and beautiful. here is the thing about the "beautiful" people....they are the fakes, the jerks and the over privileged by their own design, not by the creator's. here is the thing about being treated invisible by one to whom you are attracted.....they are the blind..as you have said, and they are missing out on one very important thing....you! awesome write, Rogue!

[Rogue]

It is downright scary how you read right through the words here.. Got all up in my thoughts.. I'm afraid for you, Man! Afraid! You don't want to be rummaging around in my attic. :P
Thank you, I appreciate your thoughts (or mine) and the kind review. :)

[quinfinn]

always a pleasure, my friend.....that hippie soul was exposed, i'm afraid!

[Angi]

The wallflower in me is jumping up and down and shouting with her fist in the air! Love this, Rogue!

[Rogue]

Aww That is an adorable visual image. Thank you, Angi. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Invisible...I have felt this way so many times before. Even in crowded rooms, sometimes, I feel as though people are not truly seeing me. It's there loss, though, truly, and partially my own fault because I tend to enjoy fading into the background.

This highlighted the idea of feeling invisible very well. You have shown emotional power in taking this strong stance with your words...the second stanza is very well done, the first is a little "wordy", but a slight edit would fix that up nicely. Well done.

[Rogue]

Thank you for reading and your input. I appreciate it. :)

[Samuel Dickens]

No, we don't see those things, but we sure wish we could. If we could defy fate, go left instead of right, zig instead of zag, would our course be a better one? I'd like to think so, and indeed spend much time pondering such. Unless someone invents a time machine, I guess we'll never know.

[Rogue]

Exactly.. That's a bit of a black hole there. If one had seen here or there, how much that changes the overall course.. We could get lost in that conversation forever. Thank you, Sam for stopping by regularly and sharing your thoughts and ideas. I always enjoy. :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

You are invisible to the human eye
yet open yourself up to the 4th dimensional beings
for invisibility is purity in vision

[Rogue]

-smile-
I always enjoy your visits.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

thx for the same

[Tate Morgan]

Do any of us truly know what the world has in store for us? I doubt It .As humans we trust in our own strengths and hide our own weakness. But we persevere through it all and watch our grandchildren grow up.Our future is rarely what we planned . It is usually not so bad. What I have found is that the things I dreamed 30 yrs ago are not applicable today. I cant see where the world will be in the years to come. So I just live for today and thank the powers that be for the chance to play. Perhaps 'Im just that little child, whose heart once broke in two. Who walks the well worn streets of old searching for memories of you.

[Rogue]

It is great what you got out of this. I truly enjoyed reading where your thoughts led you. Thank you, Tate. I appreciate it. :)

[Tate Morgan]

You are welcome

[Chris]

The past I was afraid to reach for,
hence the present I never touched -
leaving my tomorrow ...sad, lost dreams...

[Rogue]

Ahh the perfect response. -grin- You should be worried you are able to read and understand my thought process.

[Belle]

Very haunting, that the questions and the description will stay in my mind to think about. I am thinking what is it really this thing that the poet is talking.

I'll leave it this way first then I try to come back when I figure it out.

[Rogue]

Thank you for visiting and reviewing. I like to play with words and moods in my writing. What makes perfect sense to me, does not always translate to others. :)

[Sami Khalil]

"Do you see me as I pass you by?
A momentary shadow out of the corner of your eye
Do you hear me as I draw near?
The softest sound of sighs as a wind whispering in your ear'
One of your best with an excellent title .
I think you are passing by all of us and leaving your sweet treats and lovely roses to brighten up our days...:)

[Rogue]

Thank you, Sami. You are always filled with words of encouragement and I am grateful, my friend. :)

[Sami Khalil]

You deserve it...Like I said I like your latest writes a lot . I sensed I different and a high degree of poetic excellence...:)

[Rogue]

That was sweet of you to say. :)
I know who my number one fan is. -grin-

[Sami Khalil]

;)

[Rogue]

psst.. Have a great one! :P

[Sami Khalil]

You too...:)