Bodhi

Cascades of waves upon the shore
Rushing over one foot and then the other
Tug at the ankle growing stronger
Grip of the watery fingers pull
Caught now in the undertow
Sand clouded vision in roiling waters
Bruised and battered in the struggle
Layers of thin skin left on the ocean floor
Final kick free from this dissonance
Exhausted body soothed by gentle swells
Current to lift and take it where it wills
Adrift at last on peaceful seas

Reviews

[Cool Handless Luke]

Sister you hit the nail on the head with this one and as I skimmed through the reviews I saw some questioning but no one got the title...until me that is! I picked it up on the first line. That's awesome when you can have an obscure title also be the perfect title. I think you pretty much summed Bodhi's last moments perfectly. Freedom at what price is the question? The ultimate price is the answer. Your description and imagery was spot on. Well done my friend. Very well done.

[Rogue]

Thank you, I am humbled considering your newest is along a similar path and mine looks quite crude in comparison. You honor me with this one, Jeff and I appreciate it. :)

[Ken Simm.]

Moving from caught, bruised and battered to where you are free to drift and alone. Excellent metaphor. I could feel the cool sea moving me up and down in this one.
It was called Perigrination. The sea taking you where it wills.

[Rogue]

-smile-

A word I did not know, thank you, Sir. And thank you for your thoughts here. :)

[Ken Simm.]

It actually meant you would go where God took you without trying to find your own way to the early Christians.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think we all get caught in life's current...and it is how and whether we can get ourselves back to peaceful waters that is important...


can we find peaceful seas...or will we just keep drifting in dissonance.

i wonder about fate, and being taken where the current wills...

perhaps how much do we perpetrate our own fate and how much is just being pulled by current we can't control.

[Rogue]

I think eventually we reach an age where we reevaluate our lives and what is important in them. What matter and what can be discarded.. And one hopes we come out better, lighter and freer peoe on the other side of it.. Ready once more for life to take us where it will and to view it all through kinder, gentler and wiser eyes.
Thank you, Jacob. I enjoyed reading your thoughts left here. :)

[zainul]

Loved this short and compact piece.
Would you please explain its background and how it is related to its title, 'Bodhi' ?

[Rogue]

Well you know I love metaphors. :)
This is a piece on life struggle really.. All the distractions, and essentially unimportant things we let ourselves and emotions get tangled up in and pulled under by. How it is truly important to let these things go and move ourselves clear of them to find true peace and enlightenment.

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Nice writing.. Keep it up. Do u read mine 2 WHY and WHO IS A POET,

Regards,
Lucky

[shivohumsohum]

it is a will o the wisp that is in question the culprit of your obsession

[Rogue]

Hahahahahaha

Wherever the wind blows. ::D

[shivohumsohum]

infatuation and passion for retro fashion

[Rogue]

-grin-

Well if it is comfortable and fits..

[shivohumsohum]

Levis can be comfy

[Rogue]

True..
Hey! Get out of my closet!

[shivohumsohum]

what to do...this 3rd eye sees everythin

[Rogue]

-tightens bathrobe belt-

Everything?

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Holyone ...why are you indulging in forbidden Clairvoyance over oceans and lands?

[Rogue]

Hahahahaha

This has been a morning full of laughs. :D

[shivohumsohum]

Green one, I was just......Observing...

[shivohumsohum]

laughter is good for u u know blondie

[Rogue]

-eyebrow wiggle-

Oh, now that was telling. Third eye again? Or perhaps something more?

[shivohumsohum]

oh no...just a hapless mendicant begging for alms at your door

[Rogue]

Oh Lordy. :D

[shivohumsohum]

I am that too...Lord-Y lord why? but of course!

[Rogue]

Ha!
And while you're carrying our your grand designs, I fit in the scheme of things how? Daisy giver? Happy go lucky? Temper tantrum thrower? Veritable block of ice? Hmmm?
Ask Sammy.. He will tell you I'm a mess.
-laughing-

[shivohumsohum]

Michal dumped Daisy after she refused the ride on his bicycle. All other schemes proved futile in the face of incredible ladyluck. Temper had to flare for genetics run deep in the ruin of ancestry and tapestry walls a dn canvas to skip a step and jump 4 decades. Ice scares the snow queen stiff when Sammy haggar vows to clear the mess. -ponders in silent respectful observation-

[Rogue]

Hahahahaha

You are a delight, truly.

[shivohumsohum]

but not as delightful as icecream sundae bananasplit

[Rogue]

I like hot fudge, so you're good. :)

[shivohumsohum]

used to be an RV before i took this job at wc

[Rogue]

That's different. I don't know anyone who claimed to be a motor home in their previous life. :D

[shivohumsohum]

OH but i meant 'Remote-Viewer'

[Rogue]

ie: Spy!

[shivohumsohum]

no, no. lets say///cough...psychic-diplomat

[Rogue]

Hahahahahaha

Such a way with words. :P

[shivohumsohum]

whadya know ^_^

[Rogue]

And modest too, I see. :D

[shivohumsohum]

hehehehheh

[Rogue]

Now about these observations.. What have they led you to?

[shivohumsohum]

Clandestine calculations.

[Rogue]

You work for the Gubment or somethin'?

[shivohumsohum]

hahahahaahahahahha what a joke

[Rogue]

'twas indeed. :D

So what super secret plots are you hatching?

[shivohumsohum]

ok..we will discuss it in private.

[Rogue]

Ooooh intrigue!

[Angi]

I can see you tumbling in the waves! I hoped you would kick free and you did.

[Rogue]

That undertow can be tricky to navigate.
Thank you, Angi. :)

[wynn]

This is a rather interesting piece...

"Bruised and battered in the struggle
Layers of thin skin left on the ocean floor"

It seems almost if you're suggesting an emotional battle, perhaps between you and someone you are close to.

[Rogue]

It's a bit of a philosophical piece (not my strongest point) encased in metaphors (something I excel at) about awareness. Being freed from greed, hate and delusion. Finding "enlightenment".
Thank you for your thoughts and reading. :)

[wynn]

Hmm so is it referencing the illusions that humans have a tendency to fall into?

[Rogue]

In a sense. The drama, the turmoil, that which pulls us this way and that and traps us within, insecurities, wants, desires. All things that blind is to what is truly important.

[wynn]

Quite an interesting concept... thank you Rogue :)

[Sami Khalil]

"Sand clouded vision in roiling waters
Bruised and battered in the struggle
Layers of thin skin left on the ocean floor
Final kick free from this dissonance
Exhausted body soothed by gentle swells
Current to lift and take it where it wills
Adrift at last on peaceful seas "
Wow. An awesome write that is so deep in meaning and message. I love how you capture all your thoughts in just some few lines. A very good skill you have kind lady...Excellent...:)

[Rogue]

Thank you, kind Sir. While you traipse across the barren wasteland of America, water baby that I am, is on as different route. But.. Our destinations are the same. :)

[Rogue]

as = a

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. So true...Like they say opposites attract ( I mean places ) lol
You are welcome...I hope no one will take your inspiration ( inside joke ) I'll be on the lookout for trees...Lol

[Rogue]

Ha! Be good, you!
And I realized after I wrote and read this where the seeds of the underlying message came from. Thank you for that, my friend. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. Just having a little fun. You know what I mean. Have a great one...:)

[Rogue]

-grin-
I did indeed.
Oh and :P

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha...:)