Miscommunication

Experimental Poetry/Story

They say the meek shall inherit the Earth
In the end what will it really be worth?
Nothing they can ever barter or sell
Just a burned out, blood stained hell



Hello, My Dear

I am sure you have heard by now, that the war is finally over down here. They have moved those left into Community Bio Domes. There is no way to leave them. We are told that we will get air poisoning if we do.
So we live here with strangers, being fed a daily diet of Community Wellness and Government Propaganda.
John, I don't know where they sent you. I only hope you never return here. Keep living your life among the stars. I like to imagine you there happy and I am at peace.

My love always,
Marie



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Reviews

[sithlordjp]

What an exciting little hybrid we have here...! There is so many directions that could take! You can tell a complete story in very few lines, another proof of your talent! :) I like the structure, starting with that beautiful stanza (with that wicked cool line: "Just a burned out, blood stained hell", sounds so metal !!!) to the letter that follows, full of quiet despair, and love. But the notice at the end really drives the point home, the hopelessness of the situation, the full impact of that harsh future. Very good Rogue, I enjoyed it quite a bit !!!

[Rogue]

Thank you, JP. I had a feeling you would like this one. :)
As you know, I was listening to Rocket Man quite a bit. If I took the lines in the song literally.. What exactly did he leave behind and had happened during that long, long time he was gone? This was what I came up with as an answer.

[sithlordjp]

Really cool, thank you for that little glimpse into your creative process on that one. Everytime I have a bad day, I watch William Shatner's rendition of Rocket Man on youtube, cracks me up to no end !!! Then I watch Stewie Griffin's rendition of William Shatner's rendition of Rocket Man !!! Works every time !!! ;)

[MOON]

Love the combination of prose and poetry , thought provoking and powerful write.

[Rogue]

Thank you very much for stopping by to read and review it. :)

[Sami Khalil]

I agree with Frieda P's review and echo her words. A really good piece of writing and unique to say the least. Well done as always...

[Rogue]

Thank you, kind Sir! :)
An attempt to tell a tale that was rumbling around in my head by combining two mediums of writing. This is the result of that experiment. :)

[Sami Khalil]

A good experiment to say the least. You are welcome.

[Frieda P]

Ha! Wow, oh wow...this is bat shyte crazy good....and who knows, this could happen. What a great read, made my Saturday afternoon, thanks Rogue.

[Rogue]

Glad you enjoyed it. A bit of my imagination at work. This was a great review. Thank you, Frieda. :)

[Frieda P]

I loved it, didn't you see my face in astonishment? ;-)

My pleasure...