Bite Your Tongue

A lovers tiff

She said to me she liked my suit but...
"Bite your tongue" I replied
She said "but no I only meant..."
"I don't need your approval" I lied

"It really is quite nice" she whispered
her face now red with shame
"Like it or not, I hardly care
to me it's all the same"

I walked away with head held high
but feeling oh so bad
why had I uttered these angry words
and made her look so sad

Was it the disappointment
that she hadn't oohed and aahed
after the time I had spent choosing
were my feelings so on guard

I'd wanted her to be proud of me
and give me so much praise
but as usual the "but" was added
it was always there these days

So my defensive ego reared up
and had bitten her in spite
criticism I couldn't take
and my nerves told me to fight

Scream at the World and be damned
my inner self did shout
as tears now rolled down my face
while I looked for a way out

Taking my courage in both hands
I turned and wiped my eyes
"Forgive me please I'm sorry
for emitting all those lies"

"It's my love of all things you
that has made me highly strung
I only wish that I'd been silent
and bitten my own tongue"

She looked at me with sadness
and then turned her head away
"Goodbye you f*****g wanker"
was all I heard her say

The End.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Stephen]

This`s a whole story or a real life story of today`s freaking lovers you`ve been showing through the poetic precious words.

I'd wanted her to be proud of me
and give me so much praise
but as usual the "but" was added
it was always there these days

~~Lovely stanza~~

I adore this write ~~ there`s so much reality you`ve put with the depth of the words indeed and that`s all I loved about the poem. Yes, today`s youth wants love just for a night ~~ there love stands on simply one night ~~ what we call? Umm ..yeah .. One night stand ~~ Love ~~ sex ~~ drinks ~~ drugs and freaking lust ~~ that`s all the today`s new age wants making love because in their dictionary that`s a def. about love but they freaking poor lovers don`t know what they do isn`t enough to sustain their love for life making happier to live because if there`s true love then there`s no any other addiction of cocaine than the feelings of love, emotions and hearts.

Well penned, Pal ... that`s a sexy write and glad to read such kinda words in today`s world because I`m finding it hard to read such kinda pieces through which the reality reflects ... ~ I`m giving you 100/100 for this write with the depth of my heart indeed.

It`s an excellent job!

[Roderick Blakeman]

Thanks, the last time I got 100/100 it was in a maths exam 40 years ago :)

[Stephen]

Pleasure! Ha! You make me chuckle, Pal .. Umm .. Maths?? I hate freaking maths indeed. But glad to know that someone can get 100/100 ESPECIALLY in Maths .. Good to know ;-)

[lovelife]

wow that was very strong in emotions. I really liked it.

[Woody]

I suppose that it is a human trait, seeking praise and rejecting criticism. the "but" bit can hurt like hell when one is too sensitive.
your poetry is a real pleasure to read Roderick.

[Frontier]

hahaha! i loved this the rhyme and flow was superb and that ending, wow!

[Roderick Blakeman]

Superb and wow! in the same sentence is praise indeed. :)

[AnnaGMartin]

The world needs more poems like this to remind us the important lessons we tend to overlook.
Sometimes we just need to SHUT UP and LISTEN!!
Wonderfully written poem, brilliant message, a joy to read !
It left a mark on my heart.
Thank you!

[Roderick Blakeman]

Thank you so much for your delightful comments. :)