Bare

Learn the wonder of a gun yielding child

Piercing the heart of a bears embrace

She cannot see his intention as mild

Chose a mask of terror for his face

 

 

Author's Note

My first attempt at writing, constructive criticism please?? (:

Reviews

[A Writer's Curse]

Blunt and dark, with a great contrast of power and vulnerability.

[lei]

nicely done..

[Muse]

Welcome to WC. Your use of language is refreshing and original. MY only suggestion is to work on the presentation. Play with the font..the color..less is more sometimes...but don't be afraid to try something new...you might surprise yourself with the end result. :)

[R.Ivan]

Smart title, stinging language. I respect your ability to say so much with so little writing. A great start--post more!