So long

Poem written for the contest "Quote a line from your favorite song" The first line of this poem was taken from Modest Mouse (The Cold Part)

So long to this cold, cold part of the world
where storms of sadness sweep and swirl
and chill my body to the bones
I'm not so strong, nor made of stone

Goodbye to cutting bursts of pain
Goodbye to stinging sheets of rain
Goodbye to all the ones I love
I knew I could not rise above

all the hurt I feel inside
The torment I no longer hide
But you don't care, I have no doubt
So long, my dear, my time's run out

Reviews

[Champagne]

I liked the rhyme and the rhythm - well done!

[Mauricio Montoya]

whoa! This piece sounds kind of sad, but nevertheless an excellent write.

[Miss Coral]

Very simple piece, but powerful emotionally- wonderful imagery. The rhyme scheme and conclusion are perfect. Wonderfully done.

-Coral-

[Tate Morgan]

One of the best things i have read here in all my time here
Bravo
100

[nono]

You know I saw the picture and I was like I gotta see this I gotta read it! AND I'M GLAD I DID! Nice job this is just wonderful I love it I think it's one of the most interesting things I've read in a while!

[Shalini Dinesh]

I just love this poem, i could almost hear the background music to it, it rhymes so well and would sound fantastic if set on tune, lovely... the last two stanzas were just awesome...

[marisa starkilicious]

Ooh, I love modest mouse. And this is pretty good. Great imagery and writing. Nice job!

[Paul D. Aronson]

I really like this piece. The personal torment of the piece comes out vividly in the rhythm and rhyme on display here. it almost comes across to me as a final chant or mantra as one stands at the sea's edge awaiting the end of pain. very well written! Good luck in the contest :)

[AK]

An exquisite divorce poem!

[Ladysue]

wow this is so effective. the piece flows wonderfully with great emotion...so well written..