Mermaid

Poem inspired by the main character, Alisa, in the Russian film "Mermaid"

Alisa.

She’s a mermaid.

She herself is magic.

She views the world upside-down.

She’s quiet at times, yet full of emotions others often don’t see.

She takes the smallest people in the world and makes them the largest in her heart.

She’s trying to find herself.

She has green hair.

She’s strange.

 

Sometimes, I feel like Alisa.

 

I’m strange.

I dyed my hair purple.

I’m restoring meaning in my life.

I long to comfort the saddened souls.

I’m smiling, but full of emotions the others fail to notice.

I see the world inside-out.

I believe in magic.

I wish I was a mermaid…

(but I just work at a pool)

Robyn.

 

 

Reviews

[alan peter kelly]

enjoyed the humorous twist in an elegant and splendid example of a poem i want to write when i grow up...

[luciddreamer]

I see the world inside out, I believe in magic, I wish I was a mermaid, but I just work at a pool

I saw a glimpse of you through the words....fantastic job

[Molafvt]

This is a direct and explicit confession of desire and intent. The write, although a bit collegiate, was cute and informative.

[AK]

"I long to comfort the saddened souls.
I’m smiling, but full of emotions the others fail to notice."

That pretty much says it all. And your last line was great... kinda bitter-sweet. Wonderful piece! Thank you.

[Miss Coral]

This is somewhat adorable. I love the transition from the two parts. At first, I really didn't like this piece, and then: the switch. The wonderful, wonderful switch.

Great piece.. unique, simple, concise. Cute. Great job. c:

[Mia]

I like it. I'll have to tell my friend later about your purple hair dying :) She's obsessed with purple. And I never noticed this before, but you live in Cleveland? My best friend used to live there! Great poem, I love the last two lines. They have longing and humor combined together for a great mix. Excellent job :)

[Richard Williams]

A desire to be as the magical mermaid, sincerely expressed. Expressive comparison weaved with down-to-earth reality that perhaps the mermaid indeed abides within.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

this is an extraordinary gem laid on the velvet soul of a girl with amazing depth~ the understated nature of the poem makes it all the more beautiful and touching~

I wish I was a mermaid…
(but I just work at a pool)

there is something extraordinarily captivating and deeply moving about these lines that open the world of the girl to the reader poignantly~