Rain On Me

I hear the rain fall to the ground
I watch the lightning flashing
I step along the empty streets
and hear my footsteps splashing

I look around to see who's there
and only tall trees greet me
A silly smile comes to my face
My troubles are on third street

The sky gets darker with the time
The clouds are grey and gloomy
I wonder if the clouds can see
the gladness they bring to me

The clouds bring rain indeed it's true
but raindrops bring the roses
A pretty girl will grin and laugh
He loves her and she knows it

Rain starts to slow clouds leave and go
The storm gets swept to Greenville
I saw the good in all the bad
and now I see the rainbow

Reviews

[Romeion Case]

THis was absolutely lovely.....powerfully cute...:-)

[Amortentia03]

Like the girl in the poem, this made me smile too. There was a line here and there that seemed a little choppy, at least with the cadence that it fell into in my head, but overall it was a very cute and enjoyable poem. As the people before have said, the imagery was great. It really captured all of the things that I love and fascinate me about the appearance of storms. Good work!

[Patricia Gayle]

Wow! I absolutely loved it. It flowed beautifully and kind of gave me warm fuzzy feeling. :) I also love how it sucked me in from the first verse and held me right up to the very end. The imagery is wonderful as well. All around an incredible poem. Thanks for sharing.

[amandamercer`xo]

this is a really good write. it flowed so nicely. i especially love the ending :)

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"Rain starts to slow clouds leave and go
The storm gets swept to Greenville
I saw the good in all the bad
and now I see the rainbow"

{wow--i love this poem--sweet imagery-great write}

james:-)

[Art Sun]

nice work...

a very rhytmic expression of thoughts through poetry...

[miSS LEaf]

yessss, it's soo fresh and enlightening, i love it! ~L

[Lydia Blackwell]

I like this one. and I've been to Greenville. It's a lovely little town.

[Hamkar]

I agree, it flowed all over me, just like a rainfall.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

This was genuine and lovely and refreshing as the rainfall itself...i think you should use more apt punctuation marks and grammar though to add more finesse to an already lovely voice.