The Island

From an experience on a tiny island, I penned this poem. It is a bit of what I learned in that long, arduous year on that hot, little, piece of earth in the middle of the ocean.

Isn't it Strange?

Isn't it Weird?

Why when Given Little.

You feel Happy and Cheered?


With nothing.

But

Food,

Water,

And shelter.

You never Feel under the Weather.


Why is Your life Better.

Than One persons or Another.

If They are gay.

And Look forward no Further than Today?


The Less you Possess.

The More you go Bless.


Get me Not wrong.

To Have is not a Sin.

Only when You have Little.

You are More thankful Within.

Author's Note

I am open to critiques! This is one of my first poems, I hope it's palpable.

Reviews

[Rahul]

REALISTIC PIECE it is indeed. Nicely penned.

[Chris]

smooth, simplistic, and cute.

[RobbedByGreed]

Thanks :)

[Chris]

welcome ...and I was being real.

[Acucena G.]

well done , its true when you have little you feel rich and blessed because everything you get you admire and appreciate.

[RobbedByGreed]

Thanks :)

[Acucena G.]

you are welcome

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i could feel it in my fingers and my bones.

having less makes us appreciate what we have...and for some of us, people are much more important than material possessions anyway...

like you said, it is not a sin to have...but for some having more and more and more never seems to quite satisfy...so something is missing.

good piece of writing here...very thoughtful and thought provoking.

[RobbedByGreed]

Thank you :) I'm glad you approve!

[Stella Armour]

lots of lovely truths here and a pleasure to read.

[RobbedByGreed]

It's a pleasure to have others so pleased by my work :)
Thank you!

[Terohime]

You did a great job on this Poem. I look foreword for more from you. Keep Penning.
~Your friend Res

[RobbedByGreed]

Thank you! :)

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Lovely write and so true! ;-)

[RobbedByGreed]

Thank you!

[Jack...]

I found it enjoyable, I would just refrain from using capital letter where they don't belong, but that is just me. I think you did a great job for your first attempt and I have to disagree with Marie below, I like the premise of your poem.

[RobbedByGreed]

Thank you :)

[Marie]

Not a bad poem, but I can't agree wit the premise...
The more I have, the more I'm thankful...

[RobbedByGreed]

Interesting view... It leaves me to think again ;)