The young Islander

Part of the first chapter of my book.

 

There I was on one of the deadly island in the sea. My name is Nick Jackson and I am fourteen years old. This is my second month being on the island. Vicious creatures roam around the forest and beaches. All I had was a knife. There was fruit on the trees, but have been poisoned by the creatures. So I had to attach my knife on a stick dove in the ocean with the stick. Then stabbed at a couple of fish and caught them. Then I have to get out of the water because the blood attracts sharks in the area. I had a nice dinner tonight.

At night, to keep the creatures away I have to make a fire that circles all around me. I heard that these creatures on this island can understand English and can speak it. I don’t want to see if this is true because if it doesn’t I am dead. The only reason I am on this island is that a crazy pilot crashed a plane I was in and I was the only survivor in the crash. I found a first aid kit in the plane and took it with me. So at least I have a medical kit for injuries.  

When I got washed up on shore I swam in a cave. The cave had writing in it about the strange creatures. There it said that they can speak and understand English. It also said other stuff, but it was smudged or I don’t understand. Then I thought for a moment what are these creatures? Are they harmless?

Author's Note

This is part of a book I am writing. I need suggestions for these paragraphs.

Reviews

[Paul Wallace]

Write some more to it! And also, try to keep the story in the past tense.