Caught

This is a short scene of a very rich girl named Jenna who had an addiction to stealing.

Jenna ran down the corridor of her house, panting louder than ever. She could feel sweat dripping down her face and couldn’t feel anything other than disgust at how horrid she must have possibly looked. When Jenna finally reached her room, a huge crack coming down the middle from when she had the last anger fit and punched it, she didn’t hesitate to run in and slam the door behind her. She took her hand out of her pocket, a huge diamond ring shimmering across room from the light coming through the window. As she saw her room light up with little marks of rainbow all around, it hinted to Jenna to close the window curtains, just in case. It didn’t take her long to notice, even before she fully got to the window that there were two men standing outside her door. Before even being able to take a deep breath in, she hears her mother calling her from downstairs, her name ringing throughout the entire house. “F**k” Jenna muttered quietly to herself. Thoughts were rushing through her mind, trying to come up with the quickest exit. Something chimed in and Jenna made her way straight to the window. Although she knew they heard her as soon as she’d hit the grass, Jenna sprinted will all that she could but never made it through. With a huge amount of force, Jenna was taken to the ground, her arms grabbed and positioned uncomfortable behind her, handcuffing her. It was the end for her. 

Reviews

[Jonden Chickeness]

Nice little scene. This line: "Jenna finally reached my room", is it supposed to be "Jenna finally reached her room" ? I think that's the only spot it switches to first person. And at the end when she tries to escape, why try to crash through the window? Why not just open in, and maybe try to sneak out on the roof?
Your descriptions of scene is very good and her feelings are well portrayed. I would be interested to read more.

[Emilia Fox]

You're right that is a good idea, i was planning to expand it and maybe come out with more in chapters or something. I guess this was just an idea