Restrained

My mind was like a fortress

Every archer in its place

A wall that blocked out every pain

Lured it far away

 

An iron-cold mask was soon protecting

Shutting out the world

All emotions locked in tight

Not a tear betrayed

 

As the bricks grew thicker

All friends and foes were lost

Not a word of thought misplaced

Nor any love was known

 

Then a joking face appeared

From the dark it came

And though that perfect mask remained

These eyes revealed this soul

 

You reached and drew me close

But stll I pulled away

And even though I longed for you

I dared not let you know

 

Every time you touched me

Every joke you made

All were neatly stored away

For later use I say

 

All dreams I had included you

As did all thoughts too

And even though we were friends

I knew you felt it too

 

Anytime you were close

My wall of ice would thaw

Your knock I wished to answer

But still I feared the door

 

You later made excuses

Yet told about your life

And even though I listened

My wall came back up tight

 

I'm sure confusion showed

When our smiles no longer held

A love I once had cherished

Had bent the rusted chains

 

When I needed you most

Your friendship wasn't there

And now I truly long to mend

The old forgotten scars

You alone hold the key

Use it if you wish

Even though I swore no love

You can set me free

Reviews

[Windsong]

I agree with Mastermind, this is definately a better work. I can't believe how much talent you have sis. However, this line didn't flow quite right:
"When I needed you most "
How about this instead:
"When need was most"
I don't know, but that flows a little better. There's still something about that paragraph that is a little strained. You'll fix it! Love it though!
Love from the every disappearing,
Windsong

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Very heartfelt and so lovely this is.
So sad to not be abvle to say the things we truly mean or show our true feelings.
You are very talented. I love your poems.

Peace

[Mastermind]

Your best work yet, I'd say. You write better about real issues, things actually occuring, than making things up off the top of your head. Great job, it really shows the longing but still the pain of both individuals involved.

[Anata]

Wow
really nice :D
Keep up the good work!!

[Gandré]

a great possibility to solve a relationship issues.
loved your poem. so true.

[Chalkios]

Well I wish I had this poem in my hands last year ;)

Thanks xxxx