Grasping Twilight

This morning I was six years old,

       to misery immune

but as each moment came to pass,

       I’d grown by afternoon

now as dusk descends her veil

       I day-dream in the twilight,

while grasping sun and clouds

and stars…

       how old I’ll be tonight

Reviews

[Paul]

Documentation
1/27/2020
2:02 PM U.S.A. MST
This review content authored by PB Jacobs.
My review content of "Grasping Twilight," by Rita L. Sev.

Ya, know, Rita, I can't go by what I see in your picture. If I do, it won't be a description. Yeah, yeah, just out and about mausering cocktail hour. And yes, when interacting with you, I think it's better to ignore my first thoughts, and do like you say, and simmer! I get this, your Walt Disneyness!

So, you whipped something up, I see... Nah, I don't look at you as a box of Instant Mascot Breakfast Cereal! I'm a live type, silly!

So who, or what is the main character in your content, Rita? Or, is it more of a pay attention to what is in front of me thing? Ah, it's a learn communication for dummies! Yay! I think I have a review slant of your content, Rita! Be a dummy, to not be a dummy! I'll bet I'm in the ballpark, Rita.

A cosmic starburst of a thought...

I'll bet you hate being mascotted...

Alright, enough of me. If you would, comment and let me know what's what with this content. I can't guess, as I'll be wrong, either way, unless I ask you...

Consider the source...

PB Jacobs

[Motherless]

Immunity to life's experiences doesn't last long. Well done Rita

[Rita L. Sev]

No, it does not. Youth had its advantages... Thank you, M.

[Aehr]

Such a powerful poem. I especially loved the innocence depicted in the first line, and the lines "I daydream in the twilight, while grasping sun and clouds and stars..". I love how the last line can be perceived in different ways. Is it witchcraft? Is it the sadness of lost youth? I love the way it ends, leaving us wondering. Beautiful lines. Thank you for sharing. X

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much for your words, Rhea. I'm so glad you got something from these lines.

[??????]

And you have grown to be so many wonderful things:) A wonderful writer a great crafter and a great friend:) Look for an email:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Kind Unknown ;)

[??????]

Your very welcome:)

[AprilRN1210]

wheeeew!... it felt warm and light, yet powerful and heavy at the same time.. contrast of deeper meanings and such beautiful imagery.. oh how I love your writing... in is in those moments that creates, destroys, teaches, pleases, and hold so much meaning, yet they are fleeting, and at the same time unforgettable.. the same way you said so much with so little, you can start the day naive and in such a short amount of time become-- older, wiser, with more baggage.. but, keep grasping for the stars and let the dreams rule the heart, because anything is possible:)
amazing writing..

[Rita L. Sev]

:) Wish you could see my smile at your generous review, April! I have been struggling to find my Muse these days, and your words make me want to keep looking. Thank you!

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

"I day-dream in the twilight"... This is an incredible piece for so many reasons. This is truly a poet's poem... My pen hand doesn't know to applaud or take notes first!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Travis. Your words are appreciated more than you could know...

[Pryde Foltz]

A poem within a dream … a dream within an life … a life within a dream

Yeah … an abstract and image rich write, Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Pryde. Your words make me smile.

[m.s.early]

Bittersweet indeed, so much can happen in a twenty four hour lifetime :)

[Rita L. Sev]

And there's is so much in every moment... Thanks, Xavier!

[Zahra]

Sweet and consice. Wonderful process isn't it? Well penned.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Zahra!

[ANTO]

We ungrew and re-grew with you here Rita - this is a bittersweet delight and so relevant to the pace of modern life. Very comtemplative.

[Rita L. Sev]

I was feeling pretty pensive... Thank you, Anto!