Gravity

A poem fell

in the world today,

       it didn’t make a sound

 

Its gentle wisdom

touched no one,

       for no one was around

 

Its imagery and metaphor,

its meter and its tone ~

       they lifted no one’s spirit,

       for that poem was alone

 

When an earnest lyric echoes ~

into the blankness calls ~

gravity gains victory

       each time a poem falls.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Terry L & Linda L Shuff]

' Their not listening still,perhaps they never will ' Don Mclean.

[Daydreamer]

Loooove the last stanza so much!🎀🎀🎀
keep it up 🎆🎇🎆

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Manal!

[Anna Blackburn]

This is an amazing poem. So simple in length, yet so complex in meaning. Those kinds of poems are so overlooked and taken for granted. Often times they are missed. I loved it! The ending really pounded it all in and brought in the significance. Great job. It really touches the heart, soul, and mind.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Anna. I appreciate your kind words, and I am glad you were touched by this piece.

[Rocans]

Hmmm, haven't seen this idea anywhere before. I guess a poem's worth is how much it is able to "touch" someone so a poem falling unheard is pretty sad. This was very well conceived and nicely executed. Your lines are expertly weighted so it reads very smoothly, I have always been awed at how you seem to do this...almost effortlessly. I like.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you - so glad you like! :) I think often about poems unwritten, poems unread, and poems misunderstood... I appreciate your kind comments on my work, Rocans!

[Rocans]

...Of course...

[Michael G. Smith]

Very interesting point of view but my first thought was how come it didn't move the one writing it in any significant way?

[Rita L. Sev]

Hmmm... that's an intriguing question. I suppose that once it is out of the poet's hands, a poem takes on a Life of its own, trying to find a new home... Thanks for the thoughtful read and comment, Mike!

[Ahena MK]

A wonderful topic... A better photo and the best poem I have read in the couple of days... Loved the idea and rhyme...loved the way you made POEM the main character...

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Ahena! Happy you enjoyed this one. :)

[Ahena MK]

loved it !!! not very common for me too really really love a particular write .... really really good .. :)

[Tina Louise UK]

Beautiful piece...really quite touching. Enjoyed :) x

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Tia!

[Emerald Seas]

Reminds me of a few sayings that are more humorous in tone than this poem. Love the message. We, poetry, each individual have so much to offer - it's a shame when no one is around to listen, or willing to hear us out. Nice penning, Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you - Whenever I am asked about my biggest fear, I answer, "Dying with all my music left inside me." We are born to be heard, I think...

[Raymond Federle]

I see a lot of my friends here... and I usually like what they like... we all kind gravitate toward one another and most of us are wide open to new styles and formats. This was really good! I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. Unlike some people I don't mind getting read requests so send'em if ya got'em! Sometimes I don't have time to write but I have time for a quick read and a pick me up! Look forward to 'seeing you around'. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Raymond! I appreciate the read and comments, and am pretty much the same when it comes to RRs and reviews. :)